Wednesday, December 09, 2009

nature copulates

black vines entwine
to walls in the countryside
thunders bring in the cold night
trees welcome embracing rain
just like lover his beloved

soil awaits its turn
soaking in the water
to its core through it pores
quenching its thirst
as never before

lightning strikes
showing the nudity of nature
in all its splendour
in the arms of water
pouring as if to consume.

the storm abates
hunger satisfied,
each single part replete
the earth settles about
after orgasmic release


sage said...

Very nice imagery here, Gautami... Nourishing your roots!

Anonymous said...

I like this.
The orgasmic nature of the storm
The turn of having water behave like fire, consuming rather than being consumed, is a nice touch.

Lorraine said...

Oh WOW, there is so much more to water than we see, and this is Outstanding!!!

anthonynorth said...

A clever, passionate use of the prompt.

Anonymous said...

Two phrases, images, here that are well intoned, so interesting, and caught my ear.

"lightning strikes showing the nudity of nature" and "in the arms of water pouring as if to consume."


dsnake1 said...

it's been raining so much over here.
but now i see it differently.. :)

Cynthia Short said...

This was wonderful! and such a surprise, you write so beautifully about relationships, to go in a different direction was an un-expected treat. And yet, the relationship was still in the good!

Julie Jordan Scott said...

I appreciate the afterplay of the Earth. I will remember this after the rain storm which is expected. Until now, I never recognized the clear, crispness as afterglow but now... the whole world is new... thanks to YOU! :-)

Derrick said...

Hi Gautami,

This is a great interpretation. Nature arouses strong passions.

Paul Oakley said...

I like the way you use the storm as metaphor - especially the lightning illuminating the scene.

Or are you using the implications about sex as an inverted metaphor here? ;)

Anonymous said...

from Therese L. Broderick -- I like how the lower-case letters in this poem lend a feel of intimacy, a closeness to the scene, an organic natural sensuality. In agreement with the above comments by Barelyaudible and Paul, I really loved this great line:
"lightning strikes
showing the nudity of nature"

Anonymous said...

I like the imaginative extended metaphor, how the passion of process in nature is as full of ardor as our own.

Wayne Pitchko said...

I really like what you have done with this....nice use of metaphors for sure.....thanks for sharing this

Linda said...

I love that you chose nature and I feel this poem connects to Copenhagen in so many ways. bravo for that one! The other day I was feeling sad for the trees around here because our rainfall average is way below what it used to be in the fall. We have had really dry weather here over the past few years. It rained all day yesterday and snowed a little today so the trees have "hunger satisfied". Thank you for sharing, Gautami!

Irene said...

The storm imagery made me think of all the old movies that employ this device.

Zouxzoux said...

I've always found storms extremely sexual and you've definitely captured that quality.

Tamra said...

Great descriptions of the sensuality of nature. I like this line "soil awaits its turn" -

Deb said...

I like the idea of sex as a storm.