Wednesday, July 07, 2010

rolled all over

I rhyme tepid with vapid,
meanwhile, I try to
get rid of smell that is acrid
ah well, you better tell me-
does bane go with sane?!
or is it sane that is bane
does that work better?
acrid was what you bid
try what you may-
tepid wine tastes so vapid!

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Posting a distorted NaiSaiKu after aeons, I think!

17 comments:

ThomG said...

well played.

Deepak said...

really liked it.

Deepak

cadeepaknarula.blogspot.com

Tony Noland said...

I liked it, and can agree with the sentiment in the last line.

lissa said...

fun take on 3ww

Stan Ski said...

NaiSaiKu and then some - works well for 3ww too.

shail said...

That is creative!

Andy Sewina said...

Clever stuff Gautami! Sorry I've not been around lately, we've been camping in the south of England, and soaking up all the warm weather here.

ladynimue said...

this was interesting and enjoyable read for me ..

Informative too since i learnt about a new poem form.

thanks !!

Ramesh Sood said...

You a have a way to keep things lighter..keep writing Gautami.. waiting for your visit to my ROADS..

EKSwitaj said...

Very playful!

viviene blake said...

I enjoyed this, and you've given us another new form to try. I'll never remember that name: naisaiku - Japanese, I presume.

Jack said...

Gautami,

Read 3 poems now. It is true we bond with fellow bloggers and miss them if either can not visit due to any reason. This one is very good play with words of opposite / similar sense.

Take care

Elizabeth said...

Good fun with technique. Really like the word play.

Elizabeth

twitches said...

Loved this! Very clever and reads musically.

Tumblewords: said...

Enjoyed this!

Deb said...

Nice chewy words to work with!!

Harshad mehta said...

Humerous. Enjoyed.