Sunday, June 03, 2012


crouching closely to the ground
what do you chisel away?
my nerves are on edge
my heartbeat so fast

the ground splits 
you crumple that paper in your palm
drop it into that slit
why did you bruise the earth?

you could have burnt it.
in the glow of the fire
I would have watched your face
that piercing look in your eyes

when your mind crashes to ground
we both burst into the sky
no one wins nor is it a draw
seems like it is what you are good at

it is your life's mission
to demolish everything
be it for a living
or to wreck my working week

"a buried paper can be taken out
I know you will read my love letter again"


paulo guimaraes said...

The struggles of life are truly challenging, good write.

flaubert said...

I love the progression of this poem, Gautami. Well done.


Daydreamertoo said...

Awww... I hope this is all poetic licence and not your reality.
Sometimes people do take great delight in crushing us.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

This tells a story very well. One can imagine the facial expressions. The closing lines are so poignant.

S.E.Ingraham said...

I tight well-written poem, interesting and engrossing. Thank you.

Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...


kaykuala said...

There're people who thrive doing nasty things to other people. This is part of life's drama. Great write Gautama!


Laura said...

beautiful, your words dig into the heart of the reader.

Tarang Sinha said...

This is nice!:)

Ella said...

I can feel the emotions in this poem~
The dance of intrusion...powerful and painful...
Well Done

Hannah said...

I just love this stanza:

"the ground splits
you crumple that paper in your palm
drop it into that slit
why did you bruise the earth?"

Excellent poem!!

Susie Clevenger said...

A beautiful moving.

Heaven said...

What a crashing sound to the ground ~ I would stay away from him or her ~

Kim Nelson said...

Wow! One of the harshest accusations I've ever read... It is your life's mission... Well done!

Carrie Burtt said...

A beautiful capturing of the pain of conflict....great writing Gautami! :-)

ninotaziz said...

chisel away
why did you bruise the earth
your mind crashes to ground
we both burst into the sky
wreck my working week

Loved the poem, these lines most of all.

Puja Anand said...

Love this one. It sings and it stings.

Brian Miller said...

ugh on those that live only to dismantle you know...not a nice person to have to be around...

Paige + Shauna said...

your earnest feelings thread in
gold through out your poem/plea.

reminds me of when i allowed someone to chisel away at me.

fine poem.

Myrna R. said...

I like this, especially the ending where you express your confidence that he's just being mean, but will read it again. Hope you don't really know anyone this cruel, but I sure like the write.

Victoria said...

This evokes a deep wound, a sadness. Why do people need to hurt one another?

Jack said...


Read 5 poems now. Each one stands out and this one is the best. I hope to see your poems in English course some day.

Take care

Stepping Out of the Page said...

This is really beautiful... thank you for sharing!

Steph @ Stepping Out of the Page