Monday, May 20, 2013

gravity rolls around defying physics

Lighthouse Dandelions by Jamie Wyeth 
in the bleak darkness dandelions seem so nebulous
the clouds hover to take away the light
such a vision for someone who is watching from up above

opaque sun is blazing over that mindless thought
lighthouse is not cut out for cheery vegetation
such a perfect timing for the ship to approach

particles hover only to crush the spirit
torch is useless to dig out the weeds underneath the slab
why do I waste my breath over it all?

random flow of the matter within the mind
may not be popular with the crowd
but the lined cloud's moves make it up for a wonderful visual

"open the windows, let the gravity move in"

25 comments:

oldegg said...

Mankind makes such hard work of making his surroundings beautiful whilst nature seems to do it so effortlessly. We will know the secret one day when we have learned our lesson. This piece was so thought provoking that I let my mind play on the word "gravity"!

sarah said...

So lovely to have found your weblog again after a couple of years when it slipped off my radar. I see you are still writing great poetry :-)

Nanka said...

"... lined cloud's moves make it up for a wonderful visual" ~ tells me not to miss the smallest rainbow which crowns the clouds, to catch it before it fades away!!

mindlovemisery said...

This is divine!

Wanda Bates said...

Thoughts of despair made beautiful.

VaNdAnA ShArMa said...

indeed nice visuals

Cheryl said...

I like the dandelion's approach.

jaerose said...

Such a clever and enigmatic title which carries through the poem like an other worldliness..gentle and yet powerful impact..

mizfit-on-remembering said...

Always thought provoking and a bit profound, like Old Egg, you've got me thinking of gravity in different lights and moments. Your words are married well to the image. Fantastic write,

Elizabeth
http://soulsmusic.wordpress.com/2013/05/19/mizfit-on-remembering/

Sue said...

Great last line.

=)

Paige Nicole said...

Your poem made me ponder the mind.
How are thoughts can define or release us.

The Write Girl said...

I enjoyed the reflection and awareness in this poem. Stunning!

Kutamun said...

Thus has the feel of an edgy quantum reality tunnel to me, Gautami, i like !

kaykuala said...

but the lined cloud's
moves make it up for
a wonderful visual

The last line is profound. The lazy cloud movement can be captivating and can hold out on its own! Nicely Gautami!

Hank

Lisa Williams said...

Really enjoyed this reflective poem.

Maggie Grace said...

Beautiful! This is using the wordle? I had glanced at it. I'm enthralled with your writing.

flaubert said...

Gautami, this is dark and well written. I see many others have written in bleakness as well.

Pamela

brenda w said...

Strong, bleak... why do I waste my breath over it all? love this write.

Beyond Safe Harbor

Victoria said...

Always enjoy your posts Gautami. I relate to the thoughts rolling around in my head like clouds. Hard to catch up to them sometimes.

Kelvin S.M. said...

..oh, please... please do... loved your take.. smiles...

vivinfrance said...

A clever interpretation of the prompt. We are plagued with dandelions just now, but we leave them for the bees.

Your word verification is virtually unreadable - this is my fifth attempt. If you were on Wordpress, Askimet catches all the spam, no need for word verification!

seasideauthor said...

Your writing voice has become sooo
good I really did enjoy reading here. Really good!

R.K. Garon said...

Very nice.
ZQ

Belva Rae Staples said...

I like your style!

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