Thinking of profusion where paucity lies
working for that goal where ideas are spend,
ignoring useless predictions and prophecies-
not even depending on thunder, rain and wind.
bringing in authenticated data into their way
changing the course, curing without disgrace
for the anguish to diminish and flow away-
welcoming the stream to our famine-ridden place.
Cascading, cool, and to enticements slow
nevertheless, rivulets overstay their power.
Trickling over fields for green plants to grow
bitterness disappears with their first shower.
in so profound a moment, we all look forward
19 comments:
"rivulets overstay their power" I like this.
I like the journey from worry to optimism - was it inspired by the recent monsoons?
gautami,
I like the adage; a little goes a long way.
You always find the optimistic in every situation. ;-)
rel
I like the hope in this.
a very 'indian/asian' sonnet. very good too.
gautami, this is wonderful. You are so talented at writing form poetry, I don' think I could. Your images are full of hope.
love-bd
ps- I still can't I still can' get feedburner to work.
A difficult form, the sonnet. You have a penchant for form, haven't you. Nice job.
I REALLY like this... I felt as if I traveled quite a journey
Since the start of the blog, I have yet to write and post a sonnet. But you do it with such ease. Nicely done.
"Trickling over fields for green plants to grow
bitterness disappears with their first shower.
Joys abound inwardly at first, bubbling outward,
in so profound a moment, we all look forward"
I really needed this tonight, Gautami. Thank you.
So hopeful. I love the flowing, bubbling imagery.
There's a strength and confidence in your words. It seems this sonnet just flowed out of you...
"flooding joys" - i love, love, love this.
just two simple words, put together its so powerful.
thanks for sharing!
Hope 'springs' eternal.
I love the 'ish' in "the anguish to diminish" because Ishtar was the Babylonian goddess of fertility, sexual love, and war.
A lot of modern people poo-poo about 'ish' but I appreciate the subtle reference.
Well done.
I am glad that you were feeling so positive and hopeful about the universe when you wrote this.
Always searching for that light at the end. Well done Gautami!!
I think we are too busy hightlighting the negatives that we forget to see the positives.
I just love the way you use words and weave them smoothly together--the first line was my favorite, the contrasts of paucity and profusion, and just how nice that sounds together. All that in a sonnet--well done!
You have done a wonderful, optimistic and difficult poetry form.
There is hope in what you said.
Thanks!
Oh, Gautami, this is really good. I've re-read it a few times and it keeps taking me in deeper each time with your choice of verbs and images. I always love the words you choose in your writing -- it's like each word is so rich visually and with movement and emotion.
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