tiny electrons,
arrayed into words-
jump into my page
I play around with them
the fire reaches out
melting me immediately
a seed, fruition
at its fringe-
is a gesture no more
inside walls of my skull
tackle a patchy tattoo
myriads of treasure
"tiny electrons enthrall me, always"
28 comments:
oh, chuckle.
Nice!
i love the title :)
(off topic: you are tagged)
Good one!
I love the image of how words are composed.
This gave me a lovely image of you typing up your wonderful poetry..it is amazing where the words come from sometimes..Jae
"tiny electrons enthrall me, always" ... you showed this well, well written.
AH, I love it.
this was lovely !! totally :)
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Just realized you teach maths (am slow at noticing anything except poetry most times) , have you seen the show Numb3Rs ? I am watching it these days and i adore it !!
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something of a future nostalgic, I think.
funny word play
i'd sing the body electric!
I could picture this. Nice.
wow, your work is so indepth, friend. i'm impressed. as always. bless you, e.
Words are powerful indeed, just as they are in this poem :)
Nice... :)
Very true. they jump around like little devils sometimes, don't they? Enjoyed it.
Nicely done Gautami.
Pamela
Very cleverly done!
"inside walls of my skull
tackle a patchy tattoo"
I am always amazed at what you do with words. Am only now reading the first in this trilogy. I think I like your 'version' better,
Elizabeth
Oh, the magic in that first stanza! Bravo.
lovely!!!
I noticed you mentioned that math and poetry make good partners. It's also true of music and math - but I didn't know it until after high school!
Have to say, I love your writing, Gautami. Not a comment on this particular poem, just a general overflowing of admiration.
Amy Barlow Liberatore
Excellent! So often you come up with a wonderful ending. This is no exception. I love "tiny electrons enthrall me, always."
http://inthecornerofmyeye.blogspot.com/2010/11/confession.html
ideas and writing as energy down to the very frequency and source. Very cool poem!
And they me, too. :-)
what a perfect description of the imagination, and where poetry comes from!
I feel like I jumped into my computer while reading this thanks for the great trip!
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