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| Ophelia by Odilion Redon |
lying on that floor
my eyes are closed
my mind open to your every nuance
you bring me flowers
I hold those to me
I am in no mood to inhale the scent
as I am saturated with you
my soul flew to you
as an un-moored kite
you pushed me hard
I fell in a thud on that stretch of ground
where someone had painted the manhole cover, blue
"I will slip into the underground
deep into soulful sleep
you climb every mountain
as high as my sigh"
25 comments:
beautiful...love the words !
Evokes so many nuanced feelings as I read this remarkable verse.
The remarkable thing about this beautiful verse is that it conjures up some quite terrible images at the same time. Such a steadfast love betrayed by her lover. Brilliant!
Evocative and sensual betrayal! "saturated with you..." is so powerful!
I feel the loss of a deep love..a high and low...your words have pulled many thoughts from my mind
Nice job on combining two prompts!
=)
Delightful. I see that your first line is this weeks prompt at Carry on Tuesday - I'd love you to post it there too
Gautami,
Reaction to betrayal told so forcefully.
Take care
A most refreshing take on the well-known Ophelia story...
I am in awe that you could pull those two prompts together ... fabulous verse!
You paint such a wonderful image with every verse. Beautiful.
Brilliant!
This is beautiful. Saturated in bitter images, feels like she is waking from a dream.
just beautiful!
an interesting take on combining prompts. Well done!
Brings to the fore such a plethora of feelings
huh really interesting...i like you looking at it as a blue manhole cover...that is fresh...
Nice piece...love this!
This is both sensual and romantic. I love your words.
This is one of my favorites this week. Thank you for the rich imagery and unexpected lines.
Cleverly done.
Anna :o]
Very beautiful words :-)
Lush, tragic, timeless. I love the way you have personalized Ophelia’s story.
“O, you must wear your rue with a difference"
So much tension of opposites, i think its great
Oh my.
Wow.
This was incredibly visual!
Just wonderful writing.
Thank you for sharing this.
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