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just outside of my watery grave
don't ever assume I have the privilege of misery
that thought is but stale
where is my shoe,
it is too late to contemplate
remind me the chain of sequence
(I was wearing white with five carat diamond)
how I fell into water or was I pushed
I am all mushed up in there
akin to a boil in a cherry
abhorring yet fascinating
in the light of day
don't let anyone get away
I am not hidden in darkness
"not again. never again. I will float out.
I will not suffer the fate of Pluto"
24 comments:
reminds me of neil degrasse tyson's quips on pluto
Fine response to the prompt...
Haunting poem which really illuminated the image
A big thumbs up.I love it!
not even a hint is given your mystery remains tightly sealed.
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much love...
There's something particularly eerie about a drowning. Was she pushed? I like how your character expresses her dismay and anger.
Beautiful!
ZQ
What a gritty, gripping story. You really did the prompt proud!
Beautifully haunting..!
xoxo
amazing !
don't let anyone get away
I am not hidden in darkness
Elements of mystery and perhaps criminal intent hinted here. It's good to leave them wondering, Gautami!
Hank
WOW WOW WOW!
i like the twirl and swirl of emotions leading to that last line. good job
Enchanting ride down the Ganges
Your character challenges, even though I'm not sure what will happen. This is a strong piece.
Well done!
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Enchanting and mysterious ... though not a little scary ... bravo! Bastet
I love "dont ever assume I have the privilege of misery". I resonate with that line!!!!
I love that last line!
Great poem, the POV is very interesting.
What a title and haunting words...
Wow!
Ah yes, rise she will!
I like the last line.
Hats are essential...
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