Thursday, March 15, 2007

Aphasia...Poetry Thursday

This week optional idea was defined.

That is selecting a word and writing a poem defining it. I had done that before. This poem of mine is from the archives. I had written it in May 2006. I usually write a new poem for poetry thursday. As I have time constraints, I post this here now. If I do write another poem, I will post that too.
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Aphasia

thumping words
hammering
in my mind.
wanting an outlet
at the doorway of fate
asking for forbearance

aphasia.

cognizance’s end
elucidation's catastrophe
totality in the doldrums
stupefied, abeyant
i wait....

aphasia
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28 comments:

david santos said...

Hello, guatamy!
This poem is very good, thank you
have nice week

Brian said...

Very strong word, it seems almost dreadful.

DewyKnickers said...

I like how all the lines build up a sense of suspense that the end is near.

Rose

xo

Beaman said...

You make great use of words here. The larger more complicated words in the 2nd stanza are a direct 'challenge' almost, or a polar opposite of what Aphasia is. Maybe that was your intention, I don't know.
I like the structure and flow. Nice work.

polona said...

wow, powerful poem!

Fragmentsinsight said...

Very strong words filled with desperation. Great poem.
Thank you.

Yvonne

Ghost Particle said...

felt so strong, maybe because of the defining words,.

Remiman said...

gautami,
Short, effective, and right to the point.
What an extremely frustrating state it must be to be aphasic.
rel

Norma said...

Fits well the theme. I used to think Aphasia sounded like it should be a 19th century lady's name.

Thanks for visiting.

Regina Clare Jane said...

Excellent poem, Gautami... I felt that sense of frustration "at the doorway of fate
asking for forbearance"
Hope your days get easier from here on out...

Kindness (disarms the difficult) said...

that is soooo strong. have had a personal experience with aphasia. super fine expression... you rawk

etain_lavena said...

This is sooooo nice....I had to read it a few times.
Thanks for visting my blog.
Keep well:)

Don Iannone said...

Abeyant, I wait...Great line. I like.

Pat Paulk said...

Very powerful and a very sad condition.

gautami tripathy said...

Thanks David, dewyknickers,beaman,polona,Yvonne,ghost, rel, norma, regina, kindness, etain, don and pat.

brian: it is a dreadful state to be in.

I wrote it almost a year back.

paris parfait said...

It is a great poem, that seems underlined with foreboding.

sarala said...

I have seen people with aphasia. It is terrible. Being all bottled up with no language. Nice poem.

chiefbiscuit said...

The poem describes the word beautifully.

writerwoman said...

This is my favorite PT poem this week. The pace of it is perfect, the words dance off my tongue.

Miss Print said...

Hi Gautami--

Have you read Oliver Sacks' books on neurological deficit? Great food for poems there...

Sarah

gautami tripathy said...

tara: I wrote it some months back. I found the word and the poem flowed as I have seen someone go through this state.

sarala: so you know what it means.

chiefbiscuit: thanks!

writerwoman: I appreciate that! thanks!

miss print: I will chk him out, thanks!

Ron Russo said...

Thanks for you visit.
Well done here. 'thumping words...wanting an outlet' seems like it could also be a difficulty we poets sometimes experience. (Not to make light of those who actually have the condition of aphasia.)

Homo Escapeons said...

Dear Aphasian Asian,
You don't actually seem to have a true case of Aphasia since you managed to creatively express yourself.
Very clever.

I pronounce you cured.
Write two poems and call me in the morning.

Sincerely,
Dr. Escapeons

Rethabile said...

I enjoyed that. Now I have to go dig up the meaning of aphasia, for I know it can't be what I think it is:

"If you provoke me I won't turn away, aphasia and fight."

It's got to be something else.

gautami tripathy said...

ron: I know what you mean by that. We writers do go through that.

homo escapeons: You do have a point there, sir! But I am still trying to find the point...I think you need to write poetry to loosen you up. Write one on the moon.

rethabile: Glad you liked. I regard you as one of the best poets in the blog world.

Jone said...

I love the words in this poem and its rhythm.

Crafty Green Poet said...

It's nice to get an excuse once in a while to post something from the archives....

gautami tripathy said...

Thanks Jone.

crafty: sometime we do need to search our archives. Looking back I see a few forgotten pieces. Thanks!