optional idea was defined.That is selecting a word and writing a poem defining it. I had done that before. This poem of mine is from the archives. I had written it in May 2006. I usually write a new poem for poetry thursday. As I have time constraints, I post this here now. If I do write another poem, I will post that too.
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Aphasia
thumping words
hammering
in my mind.
wanting an outlet
at the doorway of fate
asking for forbearance
aphasia.
cognizance’s end
elucidation's catastrophe
totality in the doldrums
stupefied, abeyant
i wait....
aphasia
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28 comments:
Hello, guatamy!
This poem is very good, thank you
have nice week
Very strong word, it seems almost dreadful.
I like how all the lines build up a sense of suspense that the end is near.
Rose
xo
You make great use of words here. The larger more complicated words in the 2nd stanza are a direct 'challenge' almost, or a polar opposite of what Aphasia is. Maybe that was your intention, I don't know.
I like the structure and flow. Nice work.
wow, powerful poem!
Very strong words filled with desperation. Great poem.
Thank you.
Yvonne
felt so strong, maybe because of the defining words,.
gautami,
Short, effective, and right to the point.
What an extremely frustrating state it must be to be aphasic.
rel
Fits well the theme. I used to think Aphasia sounded like it should be a 19th century lady's name.
Thanks for visiting.
Excellent poem, Gautami... I felt that sense of frustration "at the doorway of fate
asking for forbearance"
Hope your days get easier from here on out...
that is soooo strong. have had a personal experience with aphasia. super fine expression... you rawk
This is sooooo nice....I had to read it a few times.
Thanks for visting my blog.
Keep well:)
Abeyant, I wait...Great line. I like.
Very powerful and a very sad condition.
Thanks David, dewyknickers,beaman,polona,Yvonne,ghost, rel, norma, regina, kindness, etain, don and pat.
brian: it is a dreadful state to be in.
I wrote it almost a year back.
It is a great poem, that seems underlined with foreboding.
I have seen people with aphasia. It is terrible. Being all bottled up with no language. Nice poem.
The poem describes the word beautifully.
This is my favorite PT poem this week. The pace of it is perfect, the words dance off my tongue.
Hi Gautami--
Have you read Oliver Sacks' books on neurological deficit? Great food for poems there...
Sarah
tara: I wrote it some months back. I found the word and the poem flowed as I have seen someone go through this state.
sarala: so you know what it means.
chiefbiscuit: thanks!
writerwoman: I appreciate that! thanks!
miss print: I will chk him out, thanks!
Thanks for you visit.
Well done here. 'thumping words...wanting an outlet' seems like it could also be a difficulty we poets sometimes experience. (Not to make light of those who actually have the condition of aphasia.)
Dear Aphasian Asian,
You don't actually seem to have a true case of Aphasia since you managed to creatively express yourself.
Very clever.
I pronounce you cured.
Write two poems and call me in the morning.
Sincerely,
Dr. Escapeons
I enjoyed that. Now I have to go dig up the meaning of aphasia, for I know it can't be what I think it is:
"If you provoke me I won't turn away, aphasia and fight."
It's got to be something else.
ron: I know what you mean by that. We writers do go through that.
homo escapeons: You do have a point there, sir! But I am still trying to find the point...I think you need to write poetry to loosen you up. Write one on the moon.
rethabile: Glad you liked. I regard you as one of the best poets in the blog world.
I love the words in this poem and its rhythm.
It's nice to get an excuse once in a while to post something from the archives....
Thanks Jone.
crafty: sometime we do need to search our archives. Looking back I see a few forgotten pieces. Thanks!
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