Sunday, October 21, 2007

the curtains---Monday Poetry Train

white curtains bellow from an open window
akin to a scene from a slow movie,

the villain has the hero cornered
who manages to escape out a window,
when the bad guy kicks the door
the drapes move wildly

the low streams of Brahms' cello
along with the wind whistling noisily
calms the atmosphere down to a reverie
while the veil ripples gently.
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14 comments:

Square1 said...

Nice imagery, and nice transition from an everyday ordinary thing into linking it with a dramatic Hollywood scene. Very creative! The use of Brahm's Cello to complete the link was the clincher. Nicely done.

Susan Helene Gottfried said...

If only real life were this picturesque... *sigh*

polona said...

i love the introduction of brahms' cello. nice dramatic twist.

Whitesnake said...

You can always come up with that little piece of magic in your writings.

Ann said...

I've always thought my life needed a soundtrack, I'm just afraid I wouldn't be allowed to choose it myself. :) Very nice poem.

Missy said...

Lovely. Simply lovely.

Danika / OpenChannel said...

This seems a little different than your other work (at least what I've read of it). This is more narrative.

I, too, like the introduction of the cello.

Antoine said...

soo detailed,i wish the story would go on and on. i was already captured me with the introduction.

Pat Paulk said...

The auditory works in well with this.

Lisa Andel said...

For some reason this made me think of directions in a screenplay.

c.s. said...

as always, your poem enlightens so beautifully. :)

Carol said...

I like curtain and cello images a lot. Well done.

Anne Douglas said...

It's kinda of like one of those movie preludes where you see something bad happen, then the movie picks up before that time. Nicely done!

Bill said...

The opening image is nicely developed.