Sunday, July 06, 2008

in a place that only sort of exists

in the silence in my room
the methodical deliberation of fingers
on keyboard,
compile the tacit exchange between you and me,
soundlessly beating across a net of stars and dreams,
meeting you in my half-comatose slumber
in a place that only sort of exists.
I glimpse through the window,
not your countenance,
but the words I would verbalize
if you were truly here.

mere text only simplifies the emotion
complicating mood making me speechless.
no matter how infuriated,
sound of my fingers on the keys
try to convey everything,
and hide it too, all at the same time.
the jumbled words dance around
and try to reach you and touch your soul
across this vast electronic chasm

"yet why do I feel sadness seep through me?"

22 comments:

Susan Helene Gottfried said...

This could be a description of what my world is like. Nicely done!

Steve said...

Come here and I'll give ya a cuddle..........

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

so beautiful and so modern :)

Donnnnn said...

Cheer up!
I am receiving you Loud and Clear...but it would stiull be wonderful to meet you in the rw.

spacedlaw said...

I've been there myself, a prisonner of my imagination - a softer prison than reality, all the more cruel for it.

me ann my camera said...

"mere text only simplifies"... so true, words sometimes frame the unfinished canvas colouring the undefined possibilities with opaqueness.

SandyCarlson said...

This is a beautiful poem about the nature of reality for those of us who experience it through our fingertips on the keyboards. No replacement for a genuine embrace, yet we give it everything else!

gardenpath said...

Love it! A cyber window!

WillThink4Wine said...

We are sensory beings! We require more than mere words, no matter how lovely. We must be touched! Here's a virtual (((Hug)))!

Pam said...

I do like the modernity of this piece. Even through the technology frame, your longing comes through.

qualcosa di bello said...

what a marvelous turn on the prompt 'through a window'...very creative & it expresses so well something i often feel

MyBellavia said...

"To reach you and touch your soul." The silence, and/or plight, in that thought, leaves one with such intense emotion. Sad, but beautiful.

Noah the Great said...

This can probably relate to any writer.

Joyce said...

Lovely word-smithing. But, as you say, sometimes words just aren't enough . . .

Roswila said...

"my fingers on the keys
try to convey everything,
and hide it too, all at the same time"

Yes, I really resonate with this.

Edward S Gault said...

Sometimes when we write to those we love, words fail(and the computer is a poor substitute for their presence).

Teri C said...

You always have such beauty in your poetry. Just wonderful.

polona said...

i can so relate to these emotions... wonderful

For The People said...

Know what you mean!

one more believer said...

i love this g... this sorta place that we participate in.. i agree tho w/comments thrz always room for a (hug) across the wires...

texasblu said...

"try to convey everything,
and hide it too, all at the same time"


ahhhh... you get it too. Wonderful piece!

maekitso said...

Oh yes! Such a powerful window, this glowing square frame. Great work.