Thursday, July 10, 2008

tears trickle slowly


tears trickle slowly
down the cheeks
when I raise my fingers
to wipe those away
I find not a single drop

clogging the throat
all the more potent
for being unshed

least they could do
to fall in torrents
cleansing the debris
washing away
my inner torment







Photo:
Rick Mobbs

21 comments:

Lirone said...

very evocative... especially the idea of putting up a finger and finding no tears there.

Pauline said...

the way you've written this reminds me of the herky-jerky hiccuping one makes when trying not to cry...

Linda said...

Oh, this is so true! I love the way you worded it!

Susan Helene Gottfried said...

I can totally relate to this!

Noah the Great said...

Excellent, excellent.

Steve said...

There's been too many tears falling.

SweetTalkingGuy said...

Yeah, there's something about unshed tears and torment - nice one..

Angelica said...

dripping with emotion. love it!

texasblu said...

This really hurts. You do well sharing the emotion. :)

Cynthia said...

Piognant and brave.

anthonynorth said...

This suggests searching, to me. The torment an unknowing.

polona said...

so much suffering... excellent!

HL said...

a real tear jerker

Raven's Wing Poetry said...

It's the unshed tears that do the worst damage.


Awesome write.

-Nicole

sister AE said...

This makes me catch my breath and feel a lump myself.

One minor critique, if you don't mind. I'm not sure it needs the last line. I understood that sentiment without it being stated explicitly.

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

the photo goes so well with the poem - great work!

Crafty Green Poet said...

its certainly the unshed ones that are the hardest...

maekitso said...

Definitely a tormented soul. Lovely work.

one more believer said...

love how you reacted/wrote abt the painting...

Linda - Nickers and Ink said...

Love how your eloquent words accompany the artwork so well.

Blessings,
Linda

THE FAMILY REUNION, at PRACTICALLY AT HOME

Linda - Nickers and Ink said...

Love how your eloquent words accompany the artwork so well.

Blessings,
Linda

THE FAMILY REUNION, at PRACTICALLY AT HOME