Monday, January 19, 2009

clearly fading

rains pelting on
window sill-
memories fade

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fresh snow
under the window-
fresh memories

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in a drab day
footprints
mark my existence

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touching those
colours which
swirl in memory

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trying to write
short verses-
a pilgrimage?

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Problems with my PC. Posting from work. Will get back to your blogs as soon as possible.

28 comments:

Homo Escapeons said...

I've heard that brevity is next to godliness.

Richard said...

tami, these are evocative and nicely connected images. I really like how the piece becomes an emotional pilgrimage at the end.

Jeeves said...

Very nice!!!

anthonynorth said...

Lovely. And I liked the humour in the last.

SandyCarlson said...

I like the subtle connection between these. And the footprints....sometimes a comfort to leave them or find them and know we share this pilgrimage....

Good luck with the computer!

Deborah Godin said...

Love the unfolding of these lined little gems. And the rain/memory is very moving.

Julia Smith said...

'fresh snow
under the window-
fresh memories'

My favorite one. We just had a heavy snowfall all day yesterday. Made getting into work this morning rather an adventure...

sage said...

sorry about your PC problems.. Here's an attempt on your theme:

breakers crash
footprints in the sand
wash away

Margie said...

Very nice....I enjoyed them all!
Especially...

fresh snow
under the window-
fresh memories

Margie

Noah the Great said...

Good as always. :D

Linda Jacobs said...

Writing poetry IS like a pilgrimage, isn't it?

I like these!

Tumblewords: said...

excellent - footprints are sometimes all we have!

gmarie said...

Nice assembly of lines-

fourwindshaiga said...

I prefer shot verses, so I am no judge. Yours are good to me.

Amias said...

Oh wow! I got to try this pilgrimage ...

"trying to write
short verses-
a pilgrimage?"

floreta said...

short verses as a pilgrimage. never thought of that!

SweetTalkingGuy said...

Love your short verses
I wrote this one for you too...
Hope you like it, phew!

gel said...

Brief and welcome verse!
Chuckling at your dash of humor (or insight?)

artpredator said...

you did it! no matter the adversity, you got something up! and they work individually and connected!

Pretty Me!! said...

Aha !! wat imagery :)

Hapi said...

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one more believer said...

love the openness [is there such a word?] of short verses... was just thinking abt that a few days ago...

nairobi said...

Cool write gauthami!!
something different from your usual style....

watermaid said...

So many facets of memory here. I like the loose connections.

lissa said...

my favorite's the first one, though the others are just as good, isn't everything a pilgrimage anyway?

Winnie the poohi said...

ah lovely haikus!

Sanjay Rajan said...

u got a renga going here. linked poems.
Sanjay

Nairobi said...

ya have checked this out....really nice...if u dont mind could you tell me more about Haiku style of poetry.....