Sunday, January 11, 2009

golden freeze

Writing short verse after a long time..

golden sun

ogles greedily-
freezes ardor

27 comments:

Jeeves said...

Sometimes short verses conveys it all!!!Like this one

KiteHorse said...

tergiversation's first rate, or is it paradox: how oppressive sun can be? Lot of thought here.

gautami tripathy said...

KiteHorse, you made my day by using the word "tergiversation" here!

Asma Ahsan said...

Nice!

Golden is the colour of warmth for me. :)

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Haiku Tuna said...

Yes, the heat from within is what ardor is all about, not the outer heat of a golden sun!

Edward S Gault said...

"Freezing" is certainly ironic here.
Nice work.

Geraldine said...

this does indeed, work! love the title: golden freeze

anthonynorth said...

Excellent piece of irony.

Amias said...

short and sweet!

SandyCarlson said...

That's a paradox that nails it perfectly. My hat's off to you!

WillThink4Wine said...

I love the economy of words. And I confess, I had to look up tergiversation! Fabulous!

watermaid said...

I like 'ogles greedily', unexpectedly 'Freez(ing) ardor'.

Susan Helene Gottfried said...

This is totally in my head space right now. Thanks; it's also giving me the sort of mental image I need to move forward.

Pam said...

Great twist-- summer freezing ardor!

Deborah Godin said...

Succinct as a doorway opening onto a prairie!

fourwindshaiga said...

and doing it beautifully!

qualcosa di bello said...

*exactly* what deborah said!!

floreta said...

simple and true!

Beth P. said...

you put into beautiful form what my rambling offering did with clumsy words...

'too much of a good thing kills the soul'

Thanks for this!

AscenderRisesAbove said...

i wish i could write long or short verse like you. you make it look so effortless but i know it is not!

Tumblewords: said...

Love's own thoughts layered with golden tints...

angie said...

I like the "g" sounds--golden, ogles...greedily.

Maggie said...

Just as I was about to enjoy the sun-ripened fruits...a cold wave hit the ardor.
I enjoyed this treat.

polona said...

it would be frozen sun in my case (so damn cold it hurts)

one more believer said...

even the simple speak loudly... it is beautiful...

Marianne H. Nielsen said...

I love it...isn't it wonderful when we can say so much with so few words. Well done!

DeLi said...

we used to have golden sun at this time but global warming sents us some fogs and storm :(