Monday, January 12, 2009

unconnected

Here I highlight Ken Wagner, whom I found via Borut's blog. The short verses are my responses to his haiku, which I have posted in the comments. I have linked the posts below each. Do check those out.


cooped up
wrapped in a shawl
i observe the wall

Response to Wind Hits by Ken Wagner

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looking at food
I see nirvana
haikuing dried up

Response to Night Drive by Ken Wagner

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flickering light-
fireflies
taking flight

Response to Night Chill by Ken Wagner

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trapped out
in the wet-
out of my brain

Response to So Trapped by Ken Wagner

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chopping wood
all day long
i missed the butterflies

Chopped Wood by Ken Wagner

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Thanks to Tikkis, Borut, Ken Wagner I am back at writing short verses.

21 comments:

anthonynorth said...

Interesting and a little surreal. Excellent.

dsnake1 said...

having fun, huh? :)

Susan Helene Gottfried said...

Cool concept, G!

No train for me again this week. I'm doing more Demo Tapes promo...

Deborah Godin said...

Cool 'ku conversation!

lissa said...

I like your responds, I read yours first and then Wagner's and I think you have mirror each haiku's thought quite well

sage said...

nicely done--I need to go read his haiku now

SweetTalkingGuy said...

I think there's probably something here for everyone.
Personally I like:

flickering light-
fireflies
taking flight

floreta said...

what a cool, interactive set of haikus!

Margie said...

Hi Gautami
It was so nice to have you visit me & leave your nice comment.
Thank you!
I was away from blogging for a while & it's nice to be back.

I enjoyed all of your haikus.
Good work.

Margie

Fledgling Poet said...

I loved all your responses...a perfect continuation of each haiku!

Tumblewords: said...

I like these - I've been following Wagners twitter for a bit and it was interesting to see your responses to his posts. Small world, short sentences... :) Good job!

Ken Wagner said...

Wow! I was at my day-job earlier when I read your mention of the link on your site - I had no idea this is what you meant.

I like yours better! I'll keep practicing.

Julia Smith said...

My favorite:

'looking at food
I see nirvana
haikuing dried up'

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

wonderful! (the last one is my favorite. :)

John Tran said...

"flickering light-
fireflies
taking flight"

Brings back memories - haven't seen a firefly for a long time. I feel so out of touch with nature.

Danika / OpenChannel said...

really cool.

haikuing! love it.

Borut said...

As still as a cat,
or just a brick in the wall:
mind concentration.

polona said...

wow, you've been busy, and in a good way!

Ghost Particle said...

me love the firefly :)

im about 1500 miles nearer to you now :P

Beaman said...

Fascinating. :)

artpredator said...

i like the last one a lot--what a great meditation! what a wonderful metaphor! i should put this on a tshirt ...