Sunday, August 01, 2010

crumbling walls

I create miniscule space-
hide there blissfully
when the walls hit me
I don't feel the pain
where did the walls come from?
I did not build those
I like vast openness
with surprises in between.
minds eye journeys through
obstacles, stops at a corner
to rest and rejuvenate.

thats where I find you, my hero-
with your arms open for me,
a cocoon of love and security

25 comments:

Stan Ski said...

Often we feel smothered, and it's at these times we need the arms of a loved one for comfort.

Tammie said...

how fantastic to have a love like that.

Lorraine said...

I am stuck between walls, so I really love this...crumbling walls

Greyscale Territory said...

Love the contrast of minuscule space for protection and the freedom of vast space! An interesting piece!

Loch Rob said...

Life sometimes causes those walls to be built, even when we don't notice the construction. To find someone special whose love pulls the walls down is indeed a gift in life.

Cynthia Short said...

Your romantic poetry is always so lovely...

flaubert said...

Gautami
this is beautifully romantic!
Pamela

Elizabeth said...

We seem to be on a very similar wavelength today, you went one way, I went another. I really like where you went.

Elizabeth

Geraldine said...

This is such an interesting take on the prompt.Well done Gautami, really enjoyed reading this work.

www.mypoeticpath.wordpress.com

anthonynorth said...

Beautiful ending to that.

Systematic Weasel said...

Wonderfully written! Great take on the prompt!

-Weasel

Linda Jacobs said...

I love the wide open spaces with surprises! And the word "hero" holds so much emotion!

Harshad mehta said...

Cocoon - Symbol of love & security.
Excellent.

Diane T said...

Interesting how you go from walls to arms wrapped around you. Your hero! Indeed, arms feel better than unwanted walls! Lovely!

SandyCarlson said...

Beautiful. To have such a cocoon to return to must be wonderful. Thank you.

Tumblewords: said...

A wonderful cocoon! Love the imagery in this piece!

Amity said...

Oh I could feel being cocooned in a hero's arms...:)

Patti said...

Love the last stanza- I love a cocoon of love and security...perfect interpretation!

SandyCarlson said...

How beautiful, to love like that.

Nimue said...

One love like that !! thats what we all need :)

Jingle said...

romantic and fun piece.

Jingle said...

http://itistimetothinkformyself.blogspot.com/2010/08/between-u-and-me.html

here is my entry for journey…
thanks for the feedback!

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Jim said...

Walls we build can be treacherous. Your poet found a lasting comfort.
Sorry I'm so late in getting back here, my week was very busy and hectic.
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gabrielle said...

Love how the mind in its fluidity overcomes walls we have outgrown.