Sunday, August 29, 2010

curling & uncurling

she sews holes
but the wholes never come into being

purple juice of grapes
spurt from her lips; stain her pristine dress

she outlines it lovingly
her doubts reflect in the walled mirror

faith is so fragile
hence she has no use of it now, nor ever

her feet disappear in water
her head sways sideways and upwards

I uncurl my mind around her-
I am not the only one. I know I stand in line.

24 comments:

jaerose said...

The last line was so strong - left me feeling sad yet I could slo feel the strength and resilience of the voice..Jae

K said...

I love the first two lines, "she sews holes..." Lovely, quite visually evocative.

Elizabeth said...

Really like the whole of this poem. Especially the line about uncurling mind around her, and makes the last line even more emphatic.

Elizabeth

b said...

I love this..."I know I stand in line."

b

Word Actress said...

Powerful words & imagery. I loved the last line, too, and wondered if ...I am not the only one...could be deleted for the most powerful...I stand in line...just a thought...

Claudia said...

i love the first two lines - sewing holes - creates that hopeless feeling - but so beautiful

mine is here

gs batty said...

I liked it. made me sad and pensive. but that is what good poetry does...makes you think and I know the world is not always happy.

Ramesh Sood said...

You always end the poem with a line that lingers in mind for a long time..excellent..

Deborah said...

Wonderfully written.

vivinfrance said...

I love the thinking behind this poem, and the use of holes/wholes.
Last line great.

flaubert said...

gautami this is a beautiful piece!
Pamela

Robert Lloyd said...

This was an excellent use of the cot prompt. I enjoyed the way it made me ponder. Thank you for sharing.

trinitystar said...

How I love your poetry Gautami.
Lovely to see that you are still writing here.
hugs for you

ladynimue said...

you are a star !!!

Bone said...

faith is so fragile
hence she has no use of it now, nor ever


Sadly beautiful all the way through.

dcwright02 said...

excellent poem! the last line stays in your head, really lingers. thanks for posting!

Larry said...

oplI like this one also glad you stopped by and left your comment I appreciate them very much ... Larry

Bibliophile By the Sea said...

Very powerful, especially the ending. Good Job

Fay's Too said...

I read this again and again and I wonder. Thank you.

Jingle said...

you have a beautiful opening,
very smooth flow,
divine job!

wiserskydiver said...

I am not the only one. I know I stand in line.
nice ending Cheers!!!

RiikaInfinityy said...

I love the flow of your poem, it is great, thank for sharing it=D

vivinfrance said...

Great opening. I need to read it again.

Kavita said...

Oh absolutely, Gautami! We are all in that line.. deeds/mistakes/reactions/love/faith are all part of life.. and eventually, we reflect - curling and uncurling indeed!
Beautifully portrayed! I enjoyed the wordplay here.. very stylishly played!

Thanks for sharing this fine poem with poetry potluck...it's a pleasure to have you here!