Sunday, August 01, 2010

wolfish grins








this road is curvy and wavy,

uphill it is not,
you can walk all of it,

still end up nowhere

the beginning is the end,

the end is the beginning

a paradox or whole truth

even great seers can't say


you see a wolf,
you see a little girl,
wearing something red

with a hood on her head

both stand at arms length,

apparently arguing.
we see the wolf crumble-
run to catch him before he falls

she ditched him for a dog,

he can't take it anymore

his grief tears you apart,

the road unravels itself
you traverse through it-

consoling the wolf

I stand there with our girl

her red aura spreads to me

I too walk out,
away from you,
never to return


"you see it is a woman's world now"

21 comments:

Stan Ski said...

My, what big ideas you have... :)

Whitesnake said...

Alas it will never be a womans world..You will always have the battle of the sexes but ulimately the male will always dominant and that is the sad truth

Systematic Weasel said...

An excellent poem filled with solid imagery. Great work!

-Weasel

Jack said...

Gautami,

Read 2 poems now. Previous one shows faith in love while this one shows self confidence. Both are well written.

Take care

s said...

WOW!!!!!Great imagery.

Ralf Bröker said...

Full of classical pictures and modern fear.

Best wishes
Ralf

Harshad mehta said...

a paradox or whole truth
even great seers can't say

Derrick said...

You bring the story into closeup, close to home. Nothing is quite as it seems.

Mary said...

And such is the way of life..people and situatons change.

irene said...

The ending has a nice surprise twist.

brenda w said...

Ha! My daughter used to say, "Girls rule, Boys drool!" I love this piece. Very well done.
~Brenda

flaubert said...

Love the imagery in this piece!
Pamela

Jingle said...

the ending is the beginning, the beginning is the ending...what brilliant words.
loved it!
;)

Diane T said...

Great imagery, and what I surprise ending. I agree, LOL!

b_ said...

Time is biting its own tail?
I like the wolf's reaction--grief.

Peggy Goetz said...

And your poem's ending is perhaps its beginning. Many good images in this.

rob kistner said...

I love the circular energy in this Gautami, and the statement of empowerment...

...rob

Raven's Wing Poetry said...

I like how you turned the tale on its head...your parallel with a lover's quarrel...the suggestion that the wolf almost needed Red to exist. And by the way, nice work with rhyming -- it worked very well, and nothing seemed forced about it.

-Nicole

Jenn Jilks said...

I love it. Thanks for visiting my blog!

Neil Reid said...

Spoken from the other gender-side, "ouch!"

Well written, that also means to say. This was also a most interesting tale turned another way. And ditched for "man's best friend", how humbling indeed. Good whimsy as well pointy point. All clever throughout.

Now there is only to stand outside the circle and see what's to be seen. Although I'll confess, I grew up without a wolf in my life so I've long rather understood the difference that doesn't matter but does to some. Well written and fresh and with a point to express. Thanks!

Jingle said...

love your version of it.
you nailed it with a few lines.
fabulous entry.
Thanks for sharing.