Thursday, April 01, 2010

eerily blue

Photo: Gathering by AlicePopkorn

I erased the orange light

painted it eerily blue
outlines of the birds
flew into me
wheels stopped in wasteland
yet I found a tree
birds scattered into nowhere
but returned and gathered near me
in such a place of quietude
they too fell silent
we watched the fading light
and drowsily fell asleep

when sands came from all sides
all of us were buried alive.

"if you come and dig now,
you will discover the fossilized we."


Lorraine said...

This is a wonderful, wonderful literary piece...I'm breathless!

Bill said...

I think I'd drop the quotation marks at the end. Otherwise, I'd just leave it alone and enjoy it.

Ralf Bröker said...

"When sand came from all sind ..." A strong turnaround this is.

Best wishes

Tumblewords: said...

Strong and provocative - a vivid piece - perfect take on the prompt image!

Julia Phillips Smith said...

Very moody and grand in scope. Love it.

Gemma Wiseman said...

A dark atmosphere and yet fossilised has a glimmer of hope as in preserved for eternity! Beautiful piece!

Michelle said...

I see your name around on Carry on Tuesday and hadn't stopped to visit your blog, at least not recently. I am glad I did today. Eerily Blue is lovely.

Yousei Hime said...

Mmmm, even without the picture is is good. Really enjoyed this. Thanks for sharing it.

Unknown said...

on the bright side its end with 'we' not 'me'

George S Batty said...

Old Grizz really likes this...well done

Raven's Wing Poetry said...

I like this, and how you molded the photo into a narrative. I really like your last stanza, your ending, the fossilized "we". Nicely done.

-Nicole (sorry I'm so late!)

Stan Ski said...

Deep, dark and moody with flashes of suggestion for a brighter future.
Great post!