Sunday, April 18, 2010

rosy mask

velvety soft,
the delicate petals
tender gentleness
into our being,

the subtle scent
touches our soul
its wholeness
fires our love

we sing paeans to it

yet the rose hides its pain
behind the masks of thorns
and I wonder why


Stan Ski said...

Pleasure/pain principle...?

Ramesh Sood said...

Rose has a right to act like a human sometime..isn't it? Your imagination and creativity is profound.. excellent..

Old Egg said...

Really beautiful words.

There must be many wonders in this world that protect their beauty against intruders. I can accept that.

anthonynorth said...

Deep words, and a good question.

Gemma Wiseman said...

The idea of rose thorns being masks is refreshing and creative! Lovely thoughts!

Aayushi Mehta said...

lovely work.

Lilibeth said...

It makes you think...and do a lot of human comparisons. Thanks for the lovely poem.

SandyCarlson said...

You have me wondering why, too. Beautifully done.

Loch Rob said...

A soft and delicate poem. The visual image and metaphor of the rose and thorns is excellent.

Denise Moncrief said...

Very beautiful and thought provoking.

Lorraine said...

so much easier to share pleasure than pain? n'est-ce pas ma chere?

MissMeliss said...

A wonderfully gentle, yet vivid, poem. The scent of roses wafted across my imagination while reading it.

sage said...

is it rose season in Dehli? I like the images--the feel and smell

b said...

Now do it in reverse Quatami.

I wonder why
behind the mast of thorns
the rose hides its pain

we sing paeans to it

fires our love
its wholeness
touches our soul
the subtle scent

into our being
tender gentleness
the delicate petal
velvety soft.

It read beautifully either way. Thank you.


Jim said...

Beautiful tale of what it feels like to be wearing a mask. The mask doesn't change things but it gives us a place to hide from the rest. :)

Thomma Lyn said...

A lovely poem about wonder and beauty, protection and pain.

Dee Martin said...

balance in everything. point and counterpoint. beautifully done.

Anonymous said...

Very nice, and I like that B pointed out it can be read in both directions. Doubly cool!

Sandra.if said...

a mask....a way to protect......

Understanding Alice said...

hm people do that dont they, hide their pain behind thorns.

love the poem

Ann (bunnygirl) said...

The rose is a bit of a paradox, isn't it?

George S Batty said...

beautiful words that caught me in a twist. always wondered why those thorns were there.

Tammie Lee said...

lovely words
many have wondered at the rose behind the thorns
perhaps so that we approach with presence and appreciation.

Patti said...

This was lovely...something so beautiful and masked as well- perfet

Dorinny said...

such a sweet melody to this poem. very beautiful imagery, great use of alliteration. i like it :) also interesting to see how it reads backwards, very nice. reminds me of something silly i wrote once (a form of poetry that someone i knew made up):

Baiser Immortel / Immortal Kiss

His rose lips wet, his heartbeat still
Absent regret, leans in to kill
A suck so tame, her skin so sweet
Love bite does claim, her life complete
As ivory seeks deeper lust
He hungrily devours thus
And penetrates, down to the soul
Reveals the fate, by moon-light stole
By moon-light stole, revealing fate
Down to her soul, he penetrates
Devouring, so hungrily
Seeks deeper lust, with ivory
Her life complete, love bite does claim
Her skin so sweet, a suck so tame
Leans in to kill, absent regret
His heartbeat still, his rose lips wet

Amity said...

beautiful one Gautami....:)

i like how u did the prompt..., it's just simply amazing!

and some of your followers just made some more wonders, isn't it?

thanks for supporting my prompt!


Cassiopeia Rises said...

Life is very sad and fleeting. Love comes and goes before you realize it was the one true love


BlueMist said...

Very true. Nicely done.

gabrielle said...

truly a paradox. such beauty wearing a crown of thorns

Tammy Brierly said...

Hi Tami, very nice!