half in shadows
my glasses hiding my eyes
the tears stream down
your shadow on my jacket
provides a kind of security blanket
I look so aloof
the boards behind enhance that
do you think
standing at the crossroads
is an easy task?
fetch that inkpot
let me pen my last note
let me raise it for your health
"my watch stopped long time ago"
23 comments:
standing at the crossroads- well written. Love the last line.
Love the last three lines.
tears stream down your shadow on my jacket...just beautiful! Thank you.
great way to combine prompts.
i like the shadow being a blanker
I'm with boog - the last three lines lift your poem into place in my soul.
All you have to do is wind it up!
Love how you used the shadow as something more concrete:)
xx
This is such a beautiful piece. So full of emotion and heart. Beautiful photo as well.
What an emotive piece. Isn't it strange how breakups hurt so much more the longer you delay their happening.
I loved the play on words with "my watch stopped long ago." It was as though your duty had been completed but he could not see it.
your shadow on my jacket
provides a kind of security blanket
I was stuck by these lines.. beautiful, Gautami.. as always.. great work..
"your shadow on my jacket
provides a kind of security blanket" Liked this line. Nice!:)
Another poignant piece..your last lines always leave me with a story in themselves..Jae
Wow Gautami.....superbly written piece. Such a different take on a picture!! And the end. ah! so unique and delightful:)
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deep, wonderful magpie.
well done...at the crossroads and there in the closing line as well..
Clever! :)
nice work, fun and interesting!
happy gooseberry day!
http://lynnaima.wordpress.com/2011/12/19/in-the-silence/
excellent tale.
Thanks for sharing with poetry picnic.
loved this - I could almost hear the intake of breath as the writer turns from fear to writing it out.
oops sorry Gautami - my profile links to an old blogger account - should be http://www.delenemartin.com
wonderful poem & image ... seamless weaving of the prompts!
beautiful talent shining here.
Incredible work,
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I found this to be mysterious. I liked "your shadow on my jacket".
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