pulsations of the elements
grip the spasm
the boat is an enigma
I feel weightless in sand
tumbling in a rare medium
the spacious vastness
pulls me in rapid succession
I am released into a misty glass
shedding my clothes, I bared my soul too
I watch the boat take away my hubris
"wipe the mist and look at the sky,
light is never far away"
21 comments:
Gorgeous poem .. compliments the picture perfectly!
This is really trippy! The words fit the picture perfectly. I kept going back and forth. One minute I'd stare at the photo, the next I'd read your words again. Cool!
This is one of my favorites!
love what u have written here.....thanks for sharing
i like the hope i feel left with in the end...nicely done...
I really enjoy poems that take on the cosmic.
nice...love the pulsating elements and these last lines are just superb and leaves the reader with a glimpse of hope
wow !! totally surreal :)
I could feel this as I read it. Well done.
You have a way with words and I really loved this poem and the mystic picture that so aptly goes with it. Very well written and expressed. clap clap!! :)
Excellent poem. I especially like the line "I watch the boat take away my hubris." Very creative use of the wordle, and so fitting for the image.
beautiful poem!
As always beautiful verse, Gautami.
Pamela
such a brilliant take ... loved it.
I can see that. Very uplifting, releasing one's cares to it, letting it go. Well written. :)
Wow! Watching the boat (symbol of wealth and status in larger vessels) taking away his greed and sin. I simply loved this, Gautami. Thank you for including the link on my blog! Peace, Amy
http://sharplittlepencil.wordpress.com/2011/12/15/too-close-no-comfort/
I love this ... very moving.
I like the idea of a boat taking away one's hubris. Very nice write.
So esoteric!
Merry Christmas and Happy New Year.
A lovely write.
Anna :o]
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