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| A Dinner Table at Night, 1884, John Singer Sargent |
she asks herself..
her mind has zoomed out her companion's voice
waiting for dessert,
is that a wise move?
she wishes for solitude
there can never be a shortcut
maybe the morning will show her a path
but for now, the bellowing curtains hold her interest
not the raging fire
nor the winds or rains
nothing can shatter her calm
"not for her, the softened lights"
20 comments:
I hope her story has a happy ending :)
Lovely interpretation of the prompt.
Finding one's own calm centre is good trick, if you can do it...
she is so cool....and unafraid, as I might be about the 'bellowing curtains'...
I love the sense of calm and solitude you have created with your words here, Gautami. The end quote emphasizes the aloof feeling. Lovely work. Thank you for sharing.
I love how she tries to focus on something simple to stay calm throughout the period.
He probably won't even notice she has lost contact with him; he must be boring!
I love the curtains- I used them in a slightly different way, as I was so often outdoors looking in!
I can relate to her angst.
This is beautiful. I love the many layers suggested by so few words. Well done!
I really enjoyed how you kept going back to the curtains, and wondering what was better out there. Well done.
I love the notion of a curtain bellowing...perhaps in song?
I love the last line.
=)
Solitude can truly be a blessed thing.
"what is behind the bellowing curtains
she asks to herself..
her mind has zoomed out her companion's voice . . ."
You sketch this in so beautifully with questions and assertions, and the wish for solitude, that I believe you whole-heartedly. I have been there!
Your opening line just grabs me, with the bellowing curtain...her calm is rich as well throughout. Nicely done!
Oh it's funny what will fascinate us at the most bizarre moments... anything to escape I guess. Nice write!
I like this, as I am very prone to tuning someone out :)
Was wondering about you during the power outage. Hope you weren't too inconvenienced.
I love the tie in with the image. I hope her calm and solitude was able to show her the path the next morning...
Awesome poem, very nice written. Full of positive energy and strenght
n air of mystery, as though she doesn't want to believe she may have been stood up or rejected. She maintains her cool. The italicized ending, and interpretation of her inmost thoughts, lovely. Great write, Gautami! Peace, Amy
Gautami,
About one at peace with self told so well.
Take care
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