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| The Moth and the Lamp, Cesar Santos |
what secret stories you seek to find
I cradle the glass ball
my wings are folded
my shoes undone
this enclosed space is my exile
my tiredness will soon make me into a pile
how I ended up here
I do not have a clue
I do know I have this itch to dance
it is like a rash one continues to scratch
now I want the wall to withdraw its claws
I will rejuvenate in no time
I could have stayed home
munched on apples
with milk and bread
but that was not to be
"I am destined for bigger things-
that french window is my silent partner"
19 comments:
good write; have a happy Sunday
much love...
love your last verse-
I love the segue from crystal ball to bread and apples:)
The first three lines really pulled me in as I wanted to see what was
in that crystal ball
Enjoyed this, especially the last verse! Very nice!
Like your itch to dance.
I passed the capcha! yipee!!
I also was pulled in by the crystal ball opening. A nice use of the words!
Love that french window...
I love the idea of the window reflecting her dance and thus being her partner. You allowed me to silently watch her do so.
A nice twist in the ending, leaves me still aching to dance! Nice Magpie.
Really enjoyed this, Gautami. Especially liked "what secret stories you seek to find."
Beautiful poem of longing. I love the imagery.
Wings are folded. For a moth, that IS the end.
But then, "I shall rejuvenate in no time" made all of us happy again. Good writing, well planned for short piece.
Very nice, I like the mixture of images it gave me.
I too, have trouble with spam too so I don't let anonymous post anymore.
"I am destined for bigger things-
that french window is my silent partner"
I like the ending where it opens up a hope for bigger things! It's great to have a finality at the ending! Nicely gautami!
Hank
Gautami Ma'am,
I wonder if web-owner's moderation can be an alternative. You can conveniently sieve through and that would discourage spammers.
Just a thought!
Hank
I like the last part...I am destined for better things.
What a wonderful write..love how the reflection from a window becomes her dance partner
Your closing lines here are so, so strong. Excellent.
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