Sunday, September 21, 2008

baser instincts



Photo by idigit teddy
artwork Natural Sculpture
from
Flickr
originally uploaded here






Attempting Erotica...*grin*


autumn nights

desiring of heating up
another body

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

bathed in cool heat
breathless, hair a mess
autumn feels like sex

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

writhing bodies
tangled sheets
storm unleashed

46 comments:

Jim said...

Hi Gautami, sounds like you fulfilled your objective from my viewpoint. Of course I'm not a critic or even a poet for that matter.
You've heard the old saying, "you can't make a silk purse from a sow's ear." That fits me in the poetry world but I have fun when I can find some mud to root in. I liked today's muddy autumn a whole lot.
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Julie said...

You work up to your topic - the third one is the best of the three. Allusion is better than description.

Edward S Gault said...

You have instilled a lot of energy in Autumn!
Thank you for sharing this.

spacedlaw said...

Unusual, but Autumn is a major part of Earth's fertility so this is fully appropriate.

venus66 said...

Wow! A good one. Write more.:)

- A - C - said...

I do favor the third one. It hints better at the topic and it's rhythmically more balanced.

Art and Poetry said...

it is a good one!

Greyscale Territory said...

Love that third stanza! It is like an imaginary, erotic painting!

anthonynorth said...

An excellent job here. I particularly like the second one.

barbs.haiku said...

You raised the intensity in each successive stanza. Being that Autumn is my favorite season, my favorite is the second.

Amalendu said...

nice one...I mean three...precise...

Michelle Johnson said...

You're right, Gautami. That picture fits very well with your poems. And, I love the way you introduced autumn through erotic poetry. The second/ third stanzas are my favorite. Nice job. Have a nice day.

Deborah Godin said...

These give a whole other (robust) context to autumn!! Would love to know more about the original of the photo, too. Nice work!

fourwindshaiga said...

I like the last one best, too.
Is that tree for real or photoshopped??

Ghost Particle said...

u did it well, very well :)

Raven said...

Amazing photo. I think the third poem is my favorite.

Your EG Tour Guide said...

WOW! The photo is amazing and the poetry too!

Within Without said...

Incredible, Gautami! Great verse, great composition, great words, "unleashing a storm."

And where'd you find that pic to illustrate it?

Excellent stuff. You da girl!

Beloved Dreamer said...

Oow... Tami, I think your poem is still steaming. Love it. Gosh how far we have come.
Excellent my friend. The photo is great!

love,Melanie

Praveen said...

a couple of gr8 lines to match an awesome snap..cheers!

SandyCarlson said...

Oh, indeed! I love the chaos of autumn. And the passion.

Pam said...

Your third poem is very successful. I could feel the electrical charge in the atmosphere.

Jade said...

autumn heat ...oh yeah...clean
and sexy.

sage said...

I don't believe I'm going to say this, but erotic haiku must be the literary equivalent of a quickie

I always enjoy your poetry--I wish I had gotten a better shot of a tree yesterday, that had split and grown back together

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

wow!! you succeeded! :)
nice haiku

cyclopseven said...

autumn nights
desiring of heating up
another body

That's good. Winter nights too, desire the same :)

Writer on Board said...

Unleash it, Gautami! Unleash it!

Writer on Board said...

But don't hurt anybody.

Steve said...

Now this one didn't do it for me, not that it matters, you have done better,,,,,

Julia Smith said...

First of all, the photo is freaky-awesome. How I'd love to come across a tree like that in my travels.

And these are my favorite lines:

'bathed in cool heat
breathless, hair a mess'

Perfect.

qualcosa di bello said...

ha! what a little cool-night snuggling leads to!! swirls of leaves falling in a storm's wind really does evoke passion

susan said...

I read each as a separate piece. Enjoyed this.

Quiet Paths said...

whew! Did someone turn the heat on in here?

Scarlet said...

Wow, I'm so glad it's the first day of fall. You never know what will happen this evening. ;)

tumblewords said...

It sure doesn't fall flat! :) Nice work!

Keshi said...

profound! wow!!

I love the pic too. Amazing!


Keshi.

teric said...

Yes, very erotic words. Great job.

Akshaya Kamalnath said...

Just one word for it...Brilliant.

Patois said...

A very lovely take on the prompt. Very well sensualized.

Donn Coppens said...

That picture had me 'stumped' and quite honestly, I am totally committed to number 3, 'storm unleashed'.

Lord Tennisanyone said...

M'lady it saddens me to see one of our own delving into the noxious world of the utterly commonplace whilst exploring the baser instincts of the lower classes.

My Word.

polona said...

i didn't know autumn can be hot ;)
the third one works best for me, too

texasblu said...

I liked the mussed up hair...

so wonderfully wicked in taking the mundane and making it spark!

kouji said...

hot lines. :) and an image of what appears to be quite a hot tree. :O

Lela B. said...

Very erotic and seductive and I can see your grin :)

Devika said...

The baser instincts -- all three were relishing..

and the image ..Natural Sculpture indeed for the theme...
brilliant words, artwork choice!

Gauthami...you made me grin, really!
see you more...