Thursday, October 30, 2008

numbing the senses senseless



within the ruined castle
behind the colossal pillars
silhouettes on the walls
come alive in the middle
of a dark moonless night

misted glass twist to a timeless
dance of whorling thoughts
making one feel palpable
time lurks in its confines,
standing to a sudden stillness

seeing an apparition coming
out of the opposite wall, I scream
resonance of which tears my ears
icy wind blows out of nowhere
numbing the senses senseless

scared I turn and run, slipping over
I fall into a deep bottomless crypt,
where snakes make a grand feast of me
all that remains are my bones, my soul
having merged with ghosts of past era

23 comments:

Jeeves said...

This is scary!!!

Stan Ski said...

I think many are running scared right now, or plunging themselves into the depths.

anthonynorth said...

A good sense of the gothic in this. Excellent.

Art and Poetry said...

its very dark being scared creates its own depths of darkness!

SweetTalkingGuy said...

This id too scary!
It's like a nightmare I had once...

Well done!

Bobbi said...

"...misted glass twist to a timeless dance of whorling thoughts."

Wow - I can read so many different things in this one line! Great job!

Kristina said...

I love how much attention you paid to sounds in your poem. I really hope this isn't some sort of gloomy interpretation of our election process!

tumblewords said...

dark and rhythmic...love the sounds and imagery...!

artpredator said...

it becomes more and more physical then ethereal!

i can hear this one ringing in my head...

ozymandiaz said...

well, at least you won't be alone
he he

Missy said...

Great offering for this weeks write. I love the chills I got.

Anonymous said...

i hate to dream this dream..very scary !!!!

Rob Kistner said...

Gautami --

Very, very creepy, and the snakes were so crawly... I hate snakes!

A ghoulish and grand tale! ;)

...rob

Whitesnake said...

"where snakes make a grand feast of me"

Gee giving snakes a bad name!

brilliant work!

Cricket said...

very appropriate for the Halloween season!

Philip Thrift said...

dance of whorling thoughts

brilliant

Nathan said...

Very gothic. I like the "whorling thoughts."

Borut said...

It's like a dream, and yet, as a Jewish mystical teacher Rabi Nahman once said: made into a story, a dream is no longer just a dream...

Greyscale Territory said...

The drama keeps coming in this one! There is almost a breathless sense of horror! Part of the fear is that the nightmare is way out of control! Enjoyed this!

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

WOW!!! I may not sleep now! :)

Jane Doe said...

A superlative piece, as usual. Love the vivid, dark imagery. Very well-penned!

kochuthresiamma p .j said...

visiting your blog for the first time.
very interesting. a haunting image, well worked out.
have bookmarked you.

polona said...

dark and scary... but a good one!