within the ruined castle
behind the colossal pillars
silhouettes on the walls
come alive in the middle
of a dark moonless night
misted glass twist to a timeless
dance of whorling thoughts
making one feel palpable
time lurks in its confines,
standing to a sudden stillness
seeing an apparition coming
out of the opposite wall, I scream
resonance of which tears my ears
icy wind blows out of nowhere
numbing the senses senseless
scared I turn and run, slipping over
I fall into a deep bottomless crypt,
where snakes make a grand feast of me
all that remains are my bones, my soul
having merged with ghosts of past era
22 comments:
This is scary!!!
I think many are running scared right now, or plunging themselves into the depths.
A good sense of the gothic in this. Excellent.
its very dark being scared creates its own depths of darkness!
This id too scary!
It's like a nightmare I had once...
Well done!
"...misted glass twist to a timeless dance of whorling thoughts."
Wow - I can read so many different things in this one line! Great job!
I love how much attention you paid to sounds in your poem. I really hope this isn't some sort of gloomy interpretation of our election process!
dark and rhythmic...love the sounds and imagery...!
it becomes more and more physical then ethereal!
i can hear this one ringing in my head...
well, at least you won't be alone
he he
i hate to dream this dream..very scary !!!!
Gautami --
Very, very creepy, and the snakes were so crawly... I hate snakes!
A ghoulish and grand tale! ;)
...rob
"where snakes make a grand feast of me"
Gee giving snakes a bad name!
brilliant work!
very appropriate for the Halloween season!
dance of whorling thoughts
brilliant
Very gothic. I like the "whorling thoughts."
It's like a dream, and yet, as a Jewish mystical teacher Rabi Nahman once said: made into a story, a dream is no longer just a dream...
The drama keeps coming in this one! There is almost a breathless sense of horror! Part of the fear is that the nightmare is way out of control! Enjoyed this!
WOW!!! I may not sleep now! :)
A superlative piece, as usual. Love the vivid, dark imagery. Very well-penned!
visiting your blog for the first time.
very interesting. a haunting image, well worked out.
have bookmarked you.
dark and scary... but a good one!
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