Sunday, November 16, 2008

foundations of wonder-------unpoem

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illusion shatters fragile

glass of courage, breaking
foundations of wonder

leaving nothing to ponder
about, other than staring
straight ahead. tactile

feelings are light and agile;
trajectory of which is moving
beyond house of yonder

still foundations of wonder
hold glass of courage, mending
illusions which were fragile

"now as hard, as strong as diamonds"


32 comments:

Deborah Godin said...

Very intricate poem - or unpoem - the courage to break and the courage to heal.

Whitesnake said...

Let's hope they are not Blood Diamonds

Like the way ya had the first and last words rhyme........

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

very nice work - perfect words.

Jim said...

A little courage goes a long way doesn't it! I'm glad you had a full glass, the first didn't fare so well.
Are illusions wrong? Bad? I wonder.
..

Greyscale Territory said...

Your glass of courage is indeed a wonder, able to deal with being shattered and able to mend from within!

Beautiful poem!

Edward S. Gault said...

Sometimes courage is stronger the second time around because then you know what your dealing with.
Great Poem.

anthonynorth said...

Courageously done. I find that, once courage is ignited, it can turn into a huge flame.

SandyCarlson said...

Mending illusions--what a painful, slow, difficult process. This is a wonderful poem. I feel the brokenness and believe in the healing.

Art and Poetry said...

Very original poem, thought provoking!

qualcosa di bello said...

very true for me...much of my courage has come from shattering experiences that have resulted in growth i could not have previously imagined

Jade said...

a perceptive heartbreaker

Devika said...

Hi Gautami,

i like you recent poems more, i should say...

i always get stuck with the last quote; here: "now as hard, as strong as diamonds"

Gautami, Element carbon is as strong as diamond, and as soft as charcoal..layered...sliding layers, they say...

and what is organic life all about- just carbon?? :-)

wishes!
devika

Pat Paulk said...

Gautami, thanks for being missed. I love how you brought the end back to the beginning...with hope.

Sue said...

grounding courage in the sense of wonder! Wonderful.

Brian said...

(((((((hugs))))))

Borut said...

Like a cat chasing its tail...!?:)

Beth P. said...

hi gautami--

as usual, complex and rich...

nietzche said, 'we often heal stronger in the broken places'

Thank you--

Pam said...

I really like the unusual breaks in the lines of this poem. Mimics the unexpected ways that glass fractures.

Michelle Johnson said...

Gautami, what a wonderful way to find healing inside an unpoem. I felt you moved to a more peaceful place in your writing and emerged happier. I also felt you were speaking about the differences between each of your homes- the one you moved from and the one you are calling home now. Well done. Have a nice day.

Julia Smith said...

Like Sue, I like the way you marry the 'foundations of wonder' to the 'glass of courage'.

Cynthia said...

I like the quiet momentum the
repetition of words lends to
your poem, and how moving
foundations of wonder is so apt.,
how we do shift in the midst
of something so terrible.

tumblewords said...

Unpoems are a form of courage and this works well!!

Linda Jacobs said...

I like your interesting rhyme scheme! I've read this poem several times now and the words are so wonderful!

artpredator said...

thanks again for getting the train going on the track!

wondering how courage could be so powerful in that glass! guess my heart's feeling too fragile today for that...

Quiet Paths said...

We don't usually choose paths which promote hardship but when we come out the stronger - therein lies the miracle. That last verse is awesome.

Beloved Dreamer said...

Tami, you have become a great poet. So free and full of flowing images. Poetry is feeling and sometimes pain. Well done my friend.


love-bd-Melanie

polona said...

i love the reversal images at the beginning and end, adding strength to the poem and the poet...

fourwindshaiga said...

Yes, a glass of courage is an illusion! I like this very much Gautami.

Writer on Board said...

Your unpoem made me dizzy. I like it.

Patois said...

Amazingly done. Love the unpoem concept.

DeLi said...

the gift of courage......so inspiring

Tammy said...

I enjoyed the strength in that last line Tami.