Wednesday, October 20, 2010

mirror at crossroads

immense resolutions
shimmer in the cauldron
steam arises out of it

I say I want to grow young with you
never old, exploring
everything new that we can

not just each other, but beyond-
the crossroads are my destinations
intersections are yours

with my finger tips
I trace out the steam off the mirror
while you watch the effect of it on me

"are you not pleased that we are both children in that image?"

37 comments:

ThomG said...

this has such a richness to it, such depth.

flaubert said...

Gautami, I absolutely love this and that second stanza, says so much. I often feel exactly that way.
Perfect to prompt.
Pamela

Greyscale Territory said...

Each stanza adds a sensitive layer of beauty! But that final one - tracing the steam and watching the effect on the image of another is creatively enchanting!

kathew said...

I love growing young with you...nice poem!

VL Sheridan said...

"I want to grow young with you" How lovely, how full of hope. Beautifully done.

pia said...

This is beautiful Gautami. In a way it reminded me of Robert Browning's ode to Elizabeth Barrett Browning which is my very favorite 19th century poem and a great compliment--kind of went the opposite way while saying the same thing

Deborah said...

I say I want to grow young with you
never old ... wonderful!

Book Bird Dog said...

Lovely poem about togetherness.

gospelwriter said...

The idea of growing young with the other is awesome - and I really liked the final stanza, a picture within a picture...

Rene/ Not The Rockefellers said...

I love "I want to grow young with you"
what an absolutely perfect thing to say!

Janet Lingel Aldrich said...

As with many of the others, I was struck by the second stanza. Especially, "I want to grow young with you".

Teresa said...

How wonderful! I love the idea of growing young together. What a great outlook.

Mary said...

Gautami, I love the idea of growing young with someone....we can be children as we wish in a mirror, I think. I do believe!

Reflections said...

Hopeful togetherness leading to the reverse image of youth. Wonderful take on the prompt.

Jinksy said...

Nothing can beat a second childhood- especially if the first was not too good! :)

Martin H. said...

"..I say I want to grow young with you.." We should take this up as a motto for life. Very nice.

Derrick said...

Allowing ourselves to explore and enjoy the wonder would evoke the child in us!

Brian Miller said...

growing young together...i like that...very nicely layered piece...

iambeingme said...

Loved it Completely...

Kit said...

I love the juxtaposition of the tangible and the everyday to the intangible and eternal.
Thanks for sharing it.

Bloggin'withAmanda said...

this is so romantic, growing young together? Wow super writing!

clare said...

beautiful! and i love the unexpected line of "i say i want to grow young with you/ never old, exploring/ everything new that we can" -- this is really lovely

Victoria said...

Lovely message of freshness in shared crossroads. Always children in wonder and curiosity when we choose to be.

Lyn said...

Have to get ahold of that mirror..eternal youth! You express so well the fleeting dream.

Storm Dweller said...

I love the idea of growing young through seeking everything new, rather than grwoing old together, and the implication of the final line is phenomenal.

emily wierenga said...

exploring everything new that we can...

what a lovely, intimate poem. thank you so much for linking.

irene said...

Like everyone else I love the idea of growing young with you!

life or something like it said...

"are you not pleased that we are both children in that image?"
Often I feel very much a child when I look at myself. All of a sudden, that doesn't seem to be a bad thing!

Ralf Bröker said...

This declaration of love is a fine song.

Best wishes
Ralf

Christine said...

A beautiful poem so loaded with imagery and emotion. Very much like the crossroads and intersections.

Jingle said...

simply fascinating.

senderupwords said...

Just beautiful. Nice take on the Mag. Love and Light, Sender

ms pie said...

it is a wonderful rich read of resolutions...

Priyanka Bhowmick said...

loved the depth in the 2nd stanza. thousands of meanings in a small poem. wonderful work!

Linda said...

Beautifully crafted poem of love

joanny said...

YES to that beautiful moment of growing young together --- perfection of writing from the soul, for it is forever young. I adore this poem and the meaning it conveys.

Oh so lovely, makes my heart sing for the love shared with my soul mate.

Cheers,
joanny

Purple Houses said...

I love this.