Sunday, October 10, 2010

that hammer

If I had a hammer, I would smash it
on your pumpkin patch, think it is your head
all blood and gore, a pulp, beauty to behold.

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a nail, essential in the centre of that wall
for your photo to be displayed for all
If I had a hammer, I would hit hard

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AppleHouse Poetry Workshop: 10/10/10: 3 lines, 10 syllables each
Saturday Centus: If I had a hammer

28 comments:

Strummed Words said...

I'd stay away if you had a hammer! Very expressive.

jaerose said...

Your hammer is your words - very powerful..Jae

Judie said...

Very strong words for a very powerful object! Good work!

Deborah said...

If I had a hammer, I would smash it on your pumpkin patch ... this made me laugh despite the blood and gore! great SC :o)

LeiffyV said...

Quite the powerful statement with this offering. I feel the frustration and anger and I feel for the pumpkin, oh the hammer wrath! Great writing!

Alakaline said...

aww! that's hitting hard.. :)

gs batty said...

you seem to have some pent up hostility. hope you resolve the issue before you find my pumkin patch

Ralf Bröker said...

Hard stuff. Hardrock, somehow. Related to Gospel ;-)

Best wishes
Ralf

jeff campbell said...

Wow!! Better the pumpkin that the real deal...I like your style...Peace and blessings

Terra said...

YIKES! I was a bit scared! Well done though

RawknRobynsGoneBlogWild said...

We'd make a fierce team with our hammers! I'm sticking with you.
Great piece.
xoRobyn

shanegenziuk said...

I feel for the pumpkin!

Ana said...

Interesting use of the prompt

Cheryl said...

Interesting poetic style. I like it.

As for smashing things, I think you've got that one covered pretty well too!

Ames said...

My goodness, the first part is kind of violent. I like the second part though. Thanks for stopping by my blog.

Mama Zen said...

Wow!

Viki said...

Sounds like your not too happy with someone, ha. Very powerful and interesting.

Anna said...

Nice poem(s).

It is clear by your SC-post that this prompt is also very useable in poetry. Works well, even if it is a bit violent. (Somebody seems to need some 'anger-management' here!)

Thank you so much for your kind words on my SC-post. With all this encouragement I may try to write a short story. It can't hurt to give it a try.

Nice to meet you. I am now a follower of your blog.

Best wishes,
Anna
For the benefit of other readers:
Anna's SC Week 23

nimaruichi said...

Hold it, let me have my say, then you can do as you like with the hammer :) !
I liked it.
Now, crash.....

Kat said...

Very well done, I could feel the rage. Nice twist on the prompt. Kat

Sue said...

Methinks it's a very good thing you don't have a hammer!

;)

Whitesnake said...

You should do somethink about your temper really!

tracyhsays.com said...

Another groovy idea for 10-10-10...nicely done :)

oldegg said...

Well who rattled your cage then? I even noticed some very carefully chosen words in the preceding comments to avoid offending you further.

Whatever the unseen motivation for such a powerful piece, it still captured the pent up feelings of your narrator so well.

Teresa said...

I confess that today, I really like that first one, and I probably shouldn't think too much, or it would give me ideas. Excellent writing!

Reflections said...

Oh so powerful is your hammer.

Nicely written.

Jenny said...

Love it! I've been known to break a dish or two but smashing a pumpkin sounds like a lot more fun!

Powerfully and evocatively written.

Thanks for linking up.

cj Schlottman said...

smash away, my dear! i used to buy breakables from the dollar store to smash with a hammer. i was grieving my husband's death and working through the anger stage. it helped!