Saturday, June 04, 2011

ass/u/me

you are NOT me
you said. rightly so.
I assumed it all
looking in the mirrored image
inverted it is, I forgot.
the end is so numbing

I don't feel pain anymore

27 comments:

V. Furnas said...

Teens suck sometimes. I love the line "mirrored image inverted" perfectly worded.

gautami tripathy said...

Hmm. You must be in your teens...

cj Schlottman said...

This one hurts. Conflict is never easy to describe, but your description of the inverted image nailed it! Thanks for this one.

Namaste..........cj

Ames said...

Self evaluation here? ~Ames

June Freaking Cleaver said...

Mirrors invert, providing us with a distorted image of ourselves.

But who are we, if we are not what we see as our reflection?

Awfully deep thoughts for a Saturday morning!

Great job!

Nonna Beach said...

Wow, this is excellent, painful and thought provoking...the imagery is illuminating !

Christine said...

I'm in my forties and sometimes feel like a teen, should take the one vowel out and think like a ten instead. Thought provoking post.

Sue said...

This one hits hard.

Nice job.

=)

flaubert said...

Powerful poem, Gautami.

Pamela

5thsister said...

oh dear...this one hit really close to home. Wonderful!

Jingle said...

poetic and beautiful.

skoots1mom said...

assuming comes back to bite

jfb57 said...

A stunning post!So much emotion in so few words!

Whitesnake said...

This is so you and I like the new look!

Rawknrobyn.blogspot.com said...

Those two last lines are especially profound. Your writing amazes me.

Monkey Man said...

Well done Sunday 160. Sometimes that reflection can seem a stranger. Thanks for playing.

Pheromone Girl said...

Wonderfully poignant. If only moments like these were rare, not frequent, they might be a little easier to swallow...

Brian Miller said...

made me think you kids who often mirror us in many way yet inverted fits at times as well...

Jo said...

so thought provoking ...

Judie said...

Ouch! I don't like that mirror, but your words are perfect!

Fiducia said...

Even reflections seem strangers at times, don't they? Wonderfully worded!

G-Man said...

Yeah...
In my mind I'm 25.
But the mirror tells me different!

Tgoette said...

Wow, this was very deep. Wonderful job as always!

Anna said...

I love this beautiful poem; even if I am not certain that I fully understand it.
It could be about two people who are in conflict with one another. It could also be about a conflict between two sides of the same individual who see him or herself in the mirror. It could be a conflict between a teenaged child and his/her parent.
It could also be an adult who remember him/herself as a younger person and has a similar conflict within that a parent could have with a child.
Poetry should be a little vague.
Great work!
Best wishes,
Anna
Miss O'Hara's Last Words" SC wk 57

Norma said...

I remember hearing years ago that assume makes an ass out of you (u) and me. Very nice. Glad to see you are still writing.

Jenny said...

I like imagery that we can each apply to our own situations. Your poem was wonderful in that allowed us each to do that.

I really liked the sense of conveyance each carefully crafted word shared. Really great writing.

the critics said...

nice....