Poetry for me is a way of living, it comes out of nowhere and I have to write it down. How I write, what I write, I decide. I am not asking you to be judgemental. I am gifted with the ability to see beyond the obvious.
Wednesday, June 08, 2011
eye for an eye
while walking the ground
I found a white rounded stone
I drilled a hole
polished it,
found a lid to match
a perfect shape
I altered it into an eye
a beady eye
that stares at me,
tranquil
A watchful eye, yet beady and stares, you create - interesting. Tranquil, and keeping your burdens - so you are relieved from the weight and now tranquil yourself? The underlying reason for this creation? Or discovered after? So many fascinating possibilities, and all intriguing. Excellent. I do like it quite a bit. Thank you. Beauty is in the eye, even a created one of rock, of the beholder :-)
Great! I love the fact that the eye-box creates a tranquil place and that you fondly store burdens in it. Burdens need to be locked away, but when you do it fondly you are embracing your complete self; you are whole. Marvelous!
So gorgeous, that concept, a bit like the sculptor who sees the object within the block of marble. Loved this, Gautami. I'm having a hard time posting the pic on my blog, so in the meantime, 3WW! Amy http://sharplittlepencil.wordpress.com/2011/06/11/prompt-etiquette-3ww/
43 comments:
When your creation from stone stares back at you—an interesting thought. Like this one very much.
the last line is the stunner. interesting that the eye is represented like a stone or stone cold about it
Your quote makes me end feeling inside out - but maybe that's where I started
Edgar Allen Poe would love this
Great use of the prompt!
Love this - so simple and powerful
TOTally ooky, as it should be. Kudos.
guess it certainly gives you a different perspective..haha...nice piece.
Love the last line! This is a very intriguing poem =)
Stone cold eye...hmm...interesting.
I don't know about Poe, but I'm sure Dali would like this - it's surreal.
Eww but aah..stones are tranquil..and I am sure they watch us too..Jae
Nicely done ... interesting imagery!
Nice perspective.
Very original take on the prompt...
Your poem is so unique ... thoroughly enjoyable
I am happy to be back here.. it is a beautiful read.. enjoyed every line..thanks Gautamy..
Gautami, your poem fits that unnerving pic quite well.
Pamela
Gautami...
Creepy and Awesome!!
Very cool! Love the image of the unblinking eye, always staring. Well done.
excellent...I love the last line especially!
A bit of a goose-bump generator, but it is so original, I really like it.
Very nice lol
Creepy but cool.
A very interesting picture and even more interesting use of the words. Chilling!
Very creative! I can't say I would have made a beady eye-but I do like your
perspective- thanks!
You let that stone eye come alive.
We all keep our burdens within a staring eye within us. I really like your take on this one Gautami,
Elizabeth
Very interesting read
Phew, I've got a thing about funny eyes!
<3
I think that eye will wait until the lock turns, the door opens....
Very unusual - but surely a valid place for 'burdens'.
I really like the idea of creating a tranquil eye in which to keep ones burdens.
very interesting!
A watchful eye, yet beady and stares, you create - interesting. Tranquil, and keeping your burdens - so you are relieved from the weight and now tranquil yourself? The underlying reason for this creation? Or discovered after? So many fascinating possibilities, and all intriguing. Excellent. I do like it quite a bit. Thank you. Beauty is in the eye, even a created one of rock, of the beholder :-)
A wonderful way to lock away troubles in the cold stare of an eye! A beautifully worked poem!
This piece is so sharp and well done.
beatuiful :)
If only we could keep our burdens locked in a stone. Nice piece.
Nice piece indeed!
Anna :o]
Great! I love the fact that the eye-box creates a tranquil place and that you fondly store burdens in it. Burdens need to be locked away, but when you do it fondly you are embracing your complete self; you are whole. Marvelous!
Like Pinocchio, a real live eye! Interesting what comes to land and thought. And that last line sets it all off so differently. Nice.
So gorgeous, that concept, a bit like the sculptor who sees the object within the block of marble. Loved this, Gautami. I'm having a hard time posting the pic on my blog, so in the meantime, 3WW! Amy
http://sharplittlepencil.wordpress.com/2011/06/11/prompt-etiquette-3ww/
Clever, imaginative.
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