Sunday, June 12, 2011

if only he could see behind

the wall was built long ago
he sat in front of it
tried to look sad
he missed sounds, shadows
his muted form
saw it slipping through fingers-
willed it to stop

21 comments:

Ioannis Passalis said...

I love this poem. I feel as if it speaks so much to my own experience. As direct as a straight line to the heart. Thank you.

Monkey Man said...

Walling off from experiences. Thanks for playing along with the Sunday 160.

Ramesh Sood said...

Good to be here...as usual..one gets something very different and unique in poetry..

Andy said...

This is so sad, Gautami.

A very profound poem.

Nonna Beach said...

Excellent !

A true poet seeks, asks questions and is inspired to find answers contained deep in each soul through their creations...you touch so many with your talent and I am grateful to be able to ponder each creation !

Sue said...

Cuts to the chase.

Nice job.

=)

Joseph Harker said...

Ghostly and mysterious, the top of an iceberg story peeking through. The italics in the last line give that wish so much strength, I like the effect.

cj Schlottman said...

Thanks for this haunting poem - sad and hopeful and yet resigned.

Namaste..........cj

Jenny said...

What a haunting and poignant gem of poetry you shared here with us.

Your writing is so skillful.

You cast your imagery so vividly. Thank you for sharing this.

kkrige said...

It is sad, but there is still strength within. Simple, but nice.

Amity said...

POignant Gautami!

But who could break the wall that divides? Thanks for sharing this piece, it speaks so much!

I am at wordpress now dear. I remember you tellin me how difficult for you to comment on my blog...please drop by when you are free!

Yours,

Amity

teric said...

So unusual and so thoughtful.

Jingle said...

amazingly beautiful.

Pheromone Girl said...

Very powerful. Wow.

PremI said...

'his muted form'could convey the whole of it.
An expression put in words so well.

Kat said...

Powerful and haunting, you've conveyed so much in so few words. I had to come back and read this again. I enjoyed it very much.

Jo said...

so haunting...

Amanda Moore said...

So sad when someone builds a wall like this you have a great insight!

Steve Isaak said...

Good, intimate piece.

Gyanban said...

Short and impactful.The sentiments are carved beautifully.Great work.

Whitesnake said...

Always visiting the darkside!

I guess that brings out the best in you........