Thursday, June 02, 2011

vitally bereft

I seek an empty space
insanity, you call it
an erratic path-
I walk in a straight line
luminous light from eyes of a deer
lead me to a small alcove
I hide my heart in there,
walk back to waste land

"bereft of something vital, 
I feel so light-
I call it an omen"

26 comments:

chiccoreal said...

Dear Gautami: Lightness of being as soul lifts off. The imagery and introspection are eluding to something..."eyes of a deer"
and "hide my heart". How "bereft of something vital" leaves one open to open. My prayer is
to reverse this; unomen the opening which only expects miracles. Very desert "wastelandish" Hope you find the "vital" again. Heartfelt wishes and thank-you!

Mama Zen said...

Beautifully done! Funny how others call it insanity.

G-Man said...

Gautami...
You just keep getting better and better each week.
A beautiful piece of work.
Loved your 55.
Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End

Brian Miller said...

a little insanity is not a bad thing though...may your heart be unhidden once more....

Teresa said...

Insanity to some is merely reality to others. I love the nature aspect to this.

Alice Audrey said...

It's a good place to leave one's heart.

MorningAJ said...

I'm being forced to walk in straight lines while my heart wants to wander. I understand this completely!

A Daft Scots Lass said...

Gorgeous 55

lime said...

above all else guard the heart...

jaerose said...

Insanity sometimes keeps you safe..haunting words..as always..Jae

Myrna R. said...

This leaves me thinking about my own insanity, my heart and my path. What a great write. Thank you.

Pheromone Girl said...

I've always been intrigued by omens, I love the way you close your story.

Beautiful!

Titanium said...

The unbearable lightness of that empty space between 'now' and 'then'... hold it gently with open hands and see what may come.

Mona said...

Sometimes, losing is more important than having...

Beautiful verse!

Margaret said...

...I hide my heart in there..

We have all done that at times...

Christine said...

It's the sane ones that are crazy.

Fiducia said...

Well stated...
Wants to walk on straight lines and how detours happen as planned..:)
Great work, as always!

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Linda said...

One person's insanity is another person's normal. Nicely done.

Stranger said...

Beautiful and heartbreaking. You sure do write so much in so few words.
I don't know if it was intentional, but the Wasteland (eliot) allusion works well here.

maglomaniac said...

The first two lines make the impact and hence I found them the most prominent.

But then the heart needs to be next to you:)

~Harsha

mindlovemisery said...

Beautiful and nothing at all wrong with insanity in fact I think its inherent in most artists, intense passion

Fred said...

love the contrast here, very nicely done. Erratic path, immediately followed by straight line. Enjoyed this. Thanks for sharing:)

Victoria said...

That place of emptiness is what we create to be filled with the divine...at least that's how I see it. Beautiful.

Fear Not the Darkness but What lies Within said...

Sheilagh Lee said well done truly lovely poem beautiful imagery,

lynnaima said...

tense yet the piece holds you in its grip :)
enjoy the potluck!
http://lynnaima.wordpress.com/2011/06/03/omega/

Someone is Special said...

gautami, I am here after a long time.. Love this poem.. Nice 55..

Someone is Special