Wednesday, August 03, 2011

hibernation revisited




















I want to hibernate for eternity
but the earth's gravity
sings a teasing ditty

I want to hibernate for eternity
but life's nitty-gritty
spares no pity

I want to hibernate for eternity
but this piercing city
offers a diversity

I want to hibernate for eternity
but the bear, who appears to be smutty
sings me a ditty

I want to hibernate for eternity
dose or medicinal quantity
make me feel bitty

"I quit being a minute entity"

Goldilocks and the Three BearsGoldilocks and the Three Bears (Picture Puffin Books)Goldilocks

18 comments:

Cynthia said...

Oh my gosh this is so adorable!
The lyrical quality is very
appealing, as is the picture that
marries well with your words.

Sheilagh Lee said...

wow very interesting and adorable

jaerose said...

The repetition is like a poke in the ribs by a big bear's claws..keeping you up..though you try and try to sleep..wonderful piece..Jae

vivinfrance said...

good rhyming.

Angel said...

Interesting style.

oldegg said...

What a lot of fun this piece is. Not a lot of room on the bed for both you and the bear. He will have to hibernate alone I expect after the smutty ditty.

Marja said...

Just love it

Chris said...

Awesome poem, want to rap with the verses :-)

Marianne said...

This was a great prompt to write to! I love your response. Very clever!

sharplittlepencil said...

Love how the girl is the one who wants to hibernate, but the bear is keeping her up! Amy
http://sharplittlepencil.wordpress.com/2011/08/04/crucifixion-texas-style/

WyomingDiva said...

Very clever and engaging rhythm!

brenda w said...

I enjoyed this Guatami. With all the prompt site closings, perhaps you would like to join us at The Sunday Whirl, where I post a wordle every Sunday at 12:01 a.m. Poems are posted all week that include the wordle words. We'd love to have you join.
~Brenda

imnotaverse said...

I like the consistent rhyme.

barbara said...

fun
I know that feeling
(minus the smutty bear)

irene said...

I want a smutty bear to sing me a ditty. The brain work here is amazing.

Madeleine Begun Kane said...

Ha! That's really good.

neil reid said...

Identity is always an interesting issue. And I'd agree, the shift in desires here, bear with girl, is an interesting point of view for your poem here. Great idea!

MM said...

Great poem, very interesting. I'm intrigued to know why the bear is smutty o_0