I pledge to tread on it
I will let the tremors enter into me
as I want to feel the sacred sea
it will get enmeshed into darkness
no plaster separates it from that tuft
if the fish hinder its sporadic ventures
if it is possible,
I will remove the stigma of the sea
it too has a right to move forward
I can listen to its whisper
even when it laughs out loud
I don't need an eye for an eye
the world is already blind.
"the deep can never go away, it only enhances"
44 comments:
Complex yet beautiful in its complexity. A voyage of self discovery. Lovely use of the wordle words.
Gautami, I am so glad that you have joined us at The Sunday Whirl. Your final stanza is astounding; it resonates a sad truth.
~Brenda
oh ... this leaves me shaking ... such sad truth, no matter how badly we want it to change
I love your final stanza, it is really wonderful! You used the wordle words to good effect here.
Such a lovely poem you wrote, great centus for laugh out loud! Thanks!
Been a while, my friend. Glad to see you here and doing what you alone can do, and with the wordle words, no less. The ocean has a call like no other, and your poem reminds all of us of that reality,
Elizabeth
A remarkable piece. Thanks for your coninued support of Carry On Tuesday - this weeks prompt, 'an eye for an eye' was the perfect finish to a perfect poem!
Ahh yes another wave of futility.
Wow - this one took a few readings to sink in, and I like that. Powerful and beautiful.
This is in no way futile, dark or sad. For me it is a positive reinforcement. However, poetry is interpreted in the reader's mind. He/she perceives what he/she wants to. It depends on the mood of the reader...
Nice way of discussing the yearning to learn about the depth and secrets of the sea :)
enjoy the potluck!!!
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I like this!
The last stanza is awesome, Gautami. Nice to see you over at the wordle site.
Pamela
amazing.
This is a lovely poem.
brilliant
The sea has the right to move forward, and we have the right to oppose it, though opposition is futile.
I love poetry about the sea and of giving it feelings like ourselves. For me it laughs out loud often, luckily I can see and hear it, as you can too.
You beautiful poetry emphasizes the complexity of our lives and all its influences.
Thank you for your visit.
A mesmerising read..
I enjoyed this greatly. Such a gentle poem with a profound message!
Sometimes it is necessary to endure the tremors..to find a control of the sea..captivating words..Jae
A great poem.
I particularly liked those last two lines,
'I don't need an eye for an eye
the world is already blind' - how very true.
Thanks for a great read
A lilting, moving piece told using one of my favorite things, the ocean in a very symbolic way...I love it !!!
Mind blowing !! You did this so easily!!....and incorporated so many prompts to good effect too!!
I really like the last stanza. ~Ames
Beautiful flowing poem of the flowing sea, much wisdom, and it feels peaceful.
You know Gautami, coming here and commenting to appreciate your poetry is akin to appreciating the beauty of someone hugely blessed with it everyday... I mean your creations always leave me wondering... a very unique style this.. and you encourage me to keep on adding new words to my thoughts.. keep weaving magic.. thanks!!!
To understand the sea - a journey of a lifetime. Your poem captures that desire well, and the quote and photos at the end work well with it. Reminded me of a quote from the Bible: "Deep calls to deep in the roar of your waterfalls; all your waves and breakers have swept over me." (Psalm 42:7)
Guatami, I couldn't help but think of tsunamis and monsoons when I read your poem. Beautiful image. Thank you.
Beautiful! The last line is so thought-provoking. laurie
love it.
Stunning poetry. Gorgeously written!
Very moving, indeed.
Namaste..........cj
Excellent .... WOW ...!!!
Isadora
Lovely work, Gautami, and your paraphrase of Gandhi at the end makes it all the more poignant. Great take on the Wordle! Peace, Amy
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A thought-provoking last line.
The opening line is amazing, outdone only by the closing two lines.
Final lines are fabulous. Great way to use the quote.
Deep, abiding poetry...you are blessed with a gift...Peace...Namaste
Great use of the prompt!! Well done!
Excellent poem, especially the last stanza.
Beautiful finish to this one. Very nice!
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"The world is already blind" indeed. Powerful something here makes me pensive again. :D
I loved the line about the world being blind. This is so lovely and complex. Your imagery, as always, is brilliantly wonderful.
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