Thursday, August 18, 2011

a mute question


I mold myself
is it viable-
what you ask of me?
tall order
a promise
extracted from my soul
would I let go-
a mute question
you can cut a part of whole
you don't see gasp of horror

I find you again, and again,
lose you every other day
to what, I know not

19 comments:

Paige said...

sounds as if the narrator is considering changing for another
person, usually a bad idea.

authentic writing- the words ring
true.

Brian Miller said...

the only one we can truly change is ourselves...

G-Man said...

Gautami...
People just need to worry about themselves.
Loved your POV 55.
Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End

Nara Malone said...

I can read this as a struggle between two people in love, but it speaks to me as part of an inner struggle. Especially the last verse. I find myself again and again and then get lost. Nice write. I love your layers.

Daydreamertoo said...

You must always be as you wish to be and not even think of changing yourself to suit someone else's need for how you ought to be unless of course you are in need of improving yourself, then there is always room for change.
Lovely prose.

MorningAJ said...

Sounds insecure. I'm glad I'm not in that position.

Alice Audrey said...

Is the order too tall? Let him come to you.

jennifaye said...

when you can't choose or when you don't really know what you want, it would be very hard to answer "a mute question." :( great writing. thought provoking.

Kim Nelson said...

the finding and losing again and again make a huge impact

Altonian said...

A deeply felt dilemma. Hold true to yourself.

hope said...

I like seeing the world through different perspectives..thank you!

izzy said...

Well- people can ask us to mold ourselves- but if it is cutting away too much of who we are, we better let go !!
I am afraid I learned the hard way on that one. Thanks!

Sheilagh Lee said...

Never mold yourself if you can't be who you are you will both be unhappy. Great poem.

Mama Zen said...

Marvelous!

Morning said...

smart 55,

thanks for sharing.

Bone said...

I really love those last three lines. Wistful.

Snaggle Tooth said...

Like this. I confess I've turned down offers before too...
Sometimes letting go of a self-built life isin't so simple- especially if you'll feel like property...

Found you at Jannies again. Every few now n thens I write poems also- not all the time, n never on cue.
I'll return

The Gooseberry Garden said...

the ending is bright.

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