Sunday, August 21, 2011

stalling

I rubbed cream into my hands-
I felt marginalized
before the time to say goodbye
descended on me

If I die young,
I do not wish for my skin 
to look shipwrecked

27 comments:

Brian Miller said...

smiles...trying to hold off the aging process...i hate to think of what i might look like when death catches up to me...

Monkey Man said...

Amen to that. Lots of water, moisturizer and covering up in the sun. Works for me. Thanks for playing along with the Sunday 160.

Jo said...

this was such a great bit of writing and on so many levels ... how i can take so much away from so few words is amazing ... needless to say i enjoyed your centus!

Mama Zen said...

Exactly!

Sue said...

I'm with you! In the past five years my skin looks more like the Mojave Desert than anything else...

=)

cj Schlottman said...

This is great - short and sweet and speaks to all of us of a certain age!
I love the analogy of rough skin and a shipwreck.

Great take on the prompt!

Namaste..........cj

moondustwriter said...

Like the way you put this together for so many prompts - now that is talent!!!

Dazee Dreamer said...

hahaha, you and me both.

jfb57 said...

Short and sweet and definitely dealing with something I understand. There is nothing worse than rough hands!

Nanka said...

It is sad if people get that feeling of being marginalized!!
Whitening creams or retarding the aging process or even hair colors, all come with their faults, and you end up looking like freaks!! What a heavy price to pay :(
Be natural is what I would advocate!! :)
Your post brought smiles. :)

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Daydreamertoo said...

You won't die young, but, this did make me smile, rubbong cream in your hands.... just in case.
Lovely imagery :)

luvlymish said...

I like the idea behind the poem.

Just thought I'd let you know that your comments on my blog are flagging up as spam, I think it's because you always include a link.

Altonian said...

Don't fall into the modern trap, just age gracefully and be yourself. The truth of one's character will always show through the wrinkles.

Gaurang Rao said...

:) Really nice words used here.
Gaurang.

Nonna Beach said...

Hahahaha ! I love it !
Brilliant...no one likes being marginalized, especially because of age ( first time I read it as margarine - ilized 'cause of the cream LOL )

Madge said...

Shipwrecked skin!! I'll take shellac thanks. :)

Mary said...

An interesting outlook. (Visiting from Carry on Tuesday). One definitely would not want shipwrecked skin.

Joseph Harker said...

"Shipwrecked" hands... love it! Such a clear way to sum up a sentiment everyone feels, from time to time.

Margaret said...

LOL Kind of like making sure your underwear has no holes. Fun write.

Rek said...

A vain last wish, I think not, many a time I have heard people comment on the appearance of the newly rendered corpse.

linda may said...

G'Day, thanks for your visit. Short and full poem you have written here. I know at you mean.

Jannie Funster said...

Shipwrecked skin -- what a super-great poetic image. And one must keep at the skin at all ages. Sun avoidance is key. But glycolic peels can work wonders!

Hope you are feeling great today!

xo

Oh, and funny to me my word verification is "tancod." Maybe codfish can tan and still look young?? :)

Paige said...

funny what concerns us and when.
honest poem.

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Christine said...

keep out of the sun, and a little dab of oil of olay works wonders too

Jenny said...

Gosh.

I read this and thought about it.

And read this and thought about it.

And I have come to the conclusion that you are the master of the metaphor. This was brilliant.

Loved it.

Rathnashikamani said...

Excellent words of poetry!