Monday, August 15, 2011

unbrushed

on a monday morning,
I see that girl rushing out
and watch her slip on the sidewalk
and a boy catch her slowly
or maybe I see it in slow motion
I too slip, and the paint splashes
on the walls, falling on ground

I had picked the rollers
out of the garbage, 
to roll on the bare walls
to cover the evidence
of our raw tactility
to give it a semblance

"now watching the boy and the girl, I want it all open"

17 comments:

Brian Miller said...

nice, love how you weave in the boy and the girlllto cover the evidence is a nice line as well...well played...

♥ Braja said...

I came here via Brian's blog, and see he's the first commenter :) He's fast, isn't he?! I don't know how he does it :)

Your'e good, Gautami....I liked the line in Hinder the Tremors, "I don't need an eye for an eye
the world is already blind."

Nice....

Donna B said...

wonderfully inventive

Kristen Haskell said...

Thought provoking indeed!

Shail said...

"to cover the evidence
of our raw tactility"

Loved these lines especially. Good one.

Tumblewords: said...

Very nice!

Nanka said...

Well done Gautami and the interconnection of the two verses makes the pattern whole!!

Mama Zen said...

I really like this.

"to cover the evidence
of our raw tactility"

Wow!

irene said...

The meaning you describe is all too real and all too intangible. Where's the evidence?

annell said...

I like this very much!

mareymercy said...

I always love your endings!

California Ink in Motion said...

Really like your choice of words:
"to cover the evidence

of our raw tactility"



Wow!
Thank you for your visit and leaving me this link to a wonderful poem.

sharplittlepencil said...

Gautami, liked this very much. Glad the boy caught the girl, but sad no one caught the speaker. The ending floats there, suspended, and I liked that, too. Nice! Amy
Mine: http://sharplittlepencil.wordpress.com/2011/08/17/strolling-we-write-poems/

flaubert said...

I just love that last stanza, Gautami.

Pamela

Nicholas V. said...

Beautiful poem... Wonderful how paint can hide many things, but it can also draw attention to others.

Erratic Thoughts said...

Ahaa!Covering evidence!
I have done some covering of secrets myself...
Nice magpie!

Jo Bryant said...

love the words playing here with the image