Monday, May 14, 2012

conversing with the fire

when I heard
time to say goodbye
crimson tears flowed freely
no, you cannot see those
they are flowing in the inside
that crunch in my heart
you cannot hear
I don't expect you too
I am compelled to forget
but I know I cannot
when the crimson tears turn clear
I will know I am cleansed

I will burn with the cinders
while you watch from afar
that kindling in your hand
will remind you of your doing
"time to say goodbye"
I whisper to the fire

26 comments:

chrisd said...

This seems to be a romantic poem about lost love but since it's mother's day here in the US, I could see this being about a child going off on their own.

Good byes are also new beginnings. How strange is that.

Lovely images.

Harshad mehta said...

This is touching deep.

S Jayanth said...

intense..carries a deep emotion that is beautifully written..

My take : The Scarlet Bond.

Tarang Sinha said...

Nice composition!:)

anthonynorth said...

Beautifully intense.

beccagivens said...

when the crimson tears turn clear
I will know I am cleansed


Oh so true!! :)

Bruce Miller said...

crimson with sparkling energy!

Jim said...

That kindling in his hand while watching your fire says 'he did her wrong.' Very nice, Tami.
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Mary said...

Lovely!

Sreeja said...

touching...

Hannah Denski said...

how sad, and yet nice...sometime the goodbyes are a necessity :)

Hannah Denski said...

how sad, and yet nice...sometime the goodbyes are a necessity :)

vivinfrance said...

The sadness of the title percolates through the whole of this poem.

Madeleine Begun Kane said...

So powerful and intense!

Anonymous said...

I was visiting you but not commenting..becuase after reading you what could I say..nothing will suffice..like this poem here.. it's so beautiful, special to your heart..nothing should be said..only savoured..

RS:)

Daydreamertoo said...

I hate goodbyes~!
So glad you found your muse again because this is lovely!

Anu said...

adorable !!
touching also ...

Mystic_Mom said...

Speaks to the heart in a really deep way. Nicely crafted.

PattiKen said...

This is so good. The last stnza is so poignant.

swapnap said...

I so relate to the cleansed feeling after all that crimson tears run clear. good work.

Kristjaan Panneman said...

Thank you for visiting my poetry blog. I am glad you liked the visit and I hope you will try to write haiku it's such a pleasure.
I would like to invite you to be part of my "Tackle It Tuesday" challenge. You can write a haiku on a given prompt and share that with us through a linking tool. The prompt for this week is Magnolia.
Enjoy writing poetry and maybe you will enjoy haiku too.

http://chevrefeuilleshaikublog.blogspot.com/2012/05/tackle-it-tuesday-day-2-magnolia.html

Jack said...

Gautami,

Read 2 poems now. Both convey deep meaning in two different aspects of life.

Take care

keiths ramblings said...

Deep and emotional. Thanks for your support of COT, I really appreciate it.

TTT said...

Beautiful !

Anuj Kumbhat said...

The language is awesome..

gs batty said...

some goodbyes burn forever...they etch your mind and soul..someone kindles the thought...a tear returns...part of your birth has been remembered...