Sunday, May 06, 2012

trellis tampers nature


water vibrates with sky
I watch the emerging stream
my mind aligns it with the trees
contrast of the blooms winks at you
I see clear dots of nature 
in the cobalt blue of your eyes

you wink at me, 
I feel the hook of yours 
pull me into you

"the sky, that stream, the trees 
take me away from daily grind, 
and I melt like ice onto you"

18 comments:

zongrik said...

you seem to really understand rivers


the river



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Mimi Foxmorton said...

Clever river...
clever write.....
:)

Quotes,Photos and a little Poetry said...

This was lovely and bit romantic and oh, what pretty eyes one must have.
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Jules said...

You have reminded me of some of the great Dutch Master Artists who were able to paint scenes in the iris' of the eyes of those they painted...
Wonderfully wordled.

You can find my Wordle hereL
http://julesgemsandstuff.blogspot.com/2012/05/trade-winds-sunday-whirl-55.html

Magical Mystical Teacher said...

People are able to hook other people in, aren't they? Sometimes it's a good thing, and sometimes not...


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Mark Windham said...

very nice, love the last stanza and the flecks of nature in the eyes.

Myrna R. said...

Sensuous and romantic. Nice, what the river inspires. Enjoyed much!

Susan Lindquist said...

I love the sense of surrender in the line ... and I melt like ice onto you" ... so sensual and comforting, in a way.

brenda w said...

I love the feel of the hook. Beautiful pulling.

Willow said...

Lovely and sensual.

Karen S. said...

Oh yes, those perfect hooks!

Sue said...

I've seen clear dots of nature in the cobalt blue of my husband's eyes.

Especially in the sun, near the water.

=)

Kevin Routh said...

I really enjoyed this!
Came here from your link at the Poets United Poetry Pantry...

Tess Kincaid said...

I really like the "clear dots of nature" in the eyes... lovely

Bone said...

I feel like your writing has a wonderful pureness and honesty to it. Sometimes innnocent, sometimes painful, but always honest.

Tumblewords: said...

The eyes tell all!

The Brave said...

I love the winking, but the last line was achingly beautiful.

Sreeja said...

Perfect!!