Was she dead? It did not matter, if she was. More important, was he dead? Her eyes opened for a sec.
death vibes-
she sent those to him,
he, blemish to society
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Why don't you try something in 160 characters? Space included!
27 comments:
Oooh there's a lot in that 160, well done!
I can understand about "death vibes." Nice haibun.
My first Sunday 160: Sunday 160
dang...you say much in your 160...and set just the tone...great job!
"If looks could kill."
Interesting 160.
My 160 is here.
very powerful Alice said it best. "If looks could kill..."
Death vibes...Amazing imagery.
160 Haiku,
very smart one!
Very powerful 160!
deep!...can anyone be that bad?
thanks for linking !
Death vibes indeed...nicely done.
Very powerful words my friend xx Thanks for linking with Potluck xx
Very beautiful... Liked it so much and I think I will try this type some time soon.. and will let you know...
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wow!
death vibes? she must be a sorcerer? wanting to phase-out those societal ills...
very nice haibun? is it?
thanks for taking part in my prompt this week...your served a challenging verse worth thinking!
Amazed by the likeness in message to mine.
http://sillyfrogsusan.wordpress.com/2010/10/11/forensic-feelings/
Yours holds even more power in fewer words:-)
ouch! death vibes. I'll be good!
great post.
Wow! This packs a lot of meaning in a few words!
There is a distinct projection of a curse on the wind! Quite intimidating! Very clever use of powerful words!
Great 160. Thanks so much for playing. Love this.
dead vibes?interesting..nice 160
160 degrees turn :D
nicely done
Cheers!!!
too good !! :)
Wow! 160 that packs a punch. Well done...
WOW! death vibes. Powerful stuff.
Short yet powerful.
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