a roaring sound
you can still hear
in the eerie silence even now
I am scared of a simple jolt
my dignity lost in the debris
mother, may I hide in your womb again?
(my life as simple as before I was born)
build me a new world
a bold world
where I can walk without an urgent need to escape
mother, please tell our leaders
to cut out the theatrics
scrape the old laws
protect us from their evil designs
"but if they do that , how would their pockets get filled?"
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There was a bomb blast outside the high court in New Delhi on 7th Sep, 2011, killing 13 people, injuring more than 60. Our government is totally useless and we are left to fend for ourselves.You can deduce the apathy of the Govt from knowing that a similar blast took place on 25th May, 2011 at the same place, and political leaders saying these blast are normal!! Do the power that are care? I don't think so...
My poem pours out from there, raw, unedited.......an anguish that can't be explained.....
28 comments:
Terrific poem; I like that you used a child's viewpoint to express your thoughts. Great use of the wordle too.
The anger and helplessness you feel underscores your words. I am sorry for the anguish of you and others in New Delhi.
My favorite line is
mother, my I hide in your womb again?
It is a beautiful plea.
My very favorite... I love this!!
You have written such excellent words here. They can apply to New Delhi, or to America. A very timely piece.
beautifully done ... you expressed this so well ... i think it is my favourite ...
Gautami, your pain is evident in this poem. I am so sorry for the problems you and the people are enduring at this time. Passionate write.
Pamela
Gautami,
These blasts you tell of sound like so many of what I get 'back-filled' on when hearing of IRA attacks in England those past decades.
If there are enough evil-doers, especially if they think they're 'in the right', they will pick targets and get to them.
A motherly womb satisfies, but whatever's taught there may get substantially lost or at least shaken with the birth trauma.
I hate contention, struggle, violence. I don't know how they can be coaxed to disappear.
Trulyfool
beautifully written - owerful
This evokes deep emotion.
Well done!
=)
Profound and chilling but with great truth. I'm so sorry for what happened in your country.
A really powerful piece of writing.
"a roaring sound
you can still hear
in the eerie silence even now
I am scared of a simple jolt
my dignity lost in the debris
mother, may I hide in your womb again?"
Very well expressed!
You have voiced here the sentiments of many people here in India!!
Recent events across the world show, even the most powerful governments have no choice but to respond to citizens' legitimate demands when they come together peacefully and persevere in their struggle. But the government and other powerful interests will attempt every trick in the book to weaken or kill this.
We have to take every chance to have our voices heard. Hope major changes in the near future will take effect and strengthen our democracy!
Sadly in this world now and for the past couple of hundred years, the world is being governed by money. Money = power and power eventually corrupts. Mankind seems to worship money as its God.
coming from the UK and living with those bombs since the 1970's all I can say is, I feel your pain there for your country and your people.
Very sad world these days and, your prose has captured it so well.
Dear Gautami,
Thank you for your kind words about my poem for 'Mother May I'. It means a lot to me that a poet like yourself liked my text.
Your poem is gripping and beautiful and serves an important purpose. Thank you for the background information. I am so sorry that these terrible blasts have occurred in your country. It is understandable that you are angry with the government. How can they say that blasts are 'normal'? I wonder if they would say that if it was their family members who were injured or died?
Thanks again for visiting.
My very best wishes,
Anna
For the benefit of other readers:
Anna's poem 'Mother May I?' SC wk 71
That was truly beautiful.
I think you nailed it! It hit me right to the core! Bravo!~Ames
Interesting and thought provoking piece. I enjoyed reading it. Great stuff.
Here is my post.
http://jackedwardspoetry.blogspot.com/2011/09/rose.html
Such beauty in these words of anguish. Well done! I'm so sorry you have to face such fears. I am sad that the world seems ruled by money. laurie
mother, may I hide in your womb again?
simply prefect and poignant too
A stirring, thought provoking poem. Times are changing. These long established government are having to face the wrath of the people for the first time. The realization that plundering a country can't go on is echoing in the streets. Times are changing.
What a deep and touching poem, right from the heart....I feel so much for the child.....blessings to you....Thanks for stopping by my blog too, it's so great having a chance to meet and share posts with other bloggers!
I appreciate this mix of the child-mother bond and the current traumas you face. My thoughts are with you and your homeland.
xoRobyn
such a bonding between mother and child I love this so much well done
http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/08/27/the-island-breeze/
So very moving. These words carry great weight and feel very solid. I love this piece.
Namaste.........cj
PS - Thanks for your comment on "Ragtop!"
This piece is really powerful and conveys your anguish and frustration at the state of affairs. I feel the same.
I also wrote a piece in despair at the powers that be
http://respectandacceptance.wordpress.com/2011/09/01/liberacism/
A very powerful piece of writing.
I thought telling it from the child's eye gave it added poignancy. The last line was a tremendous finish.
Thanks for a great read.
this is brilliant..
You’ve got superb talent in creative writing,
Keep it up.
Please check out short story slam week 10 prompt today.
It is great to write and entertain our children,
Don’t you agree?
Give it a try,
Let your beautiful imagination fly.
Best.
Happy Autumn!
xoxox
This was so powerful.
Can you send it into a newspaper for the opinion page?
I love the plea about hiding in the womb again.
Really, really touching.
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