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it was a mistake to invite you
I need to rest the cause
my conscience is clear
we can never be friends
our communicate does not translate into that
not even for a second, I want to be with you
nothing will come out of it if we get together
this is no lab
I will not write a note
"the wrinkles on the potato skin
cannot detect the sick relationship
why are you trying to find bones, then?"
23 comments:
This is true so often when a relationship fails.
We've all been to that place...!
Well and truly said, my friend. Strong and clear.
pain inscribed between the lines and in the shadows
Excellent
This drips with vitriol and passion. A lesson to be learned. Well done.
As always you say it better than anyone.
Exasperation that the other one just doesn't see it! No note is good, the other will no doubt see hope whatever the wording.
Damn bones. Strong write. I'm going back for seconds. :)
No Rest on Avenue B
...and it's not always easy to draw the line between yesterday and today...good write
Oh so very sad, endings can be so tragic....
Friendships are are supposed to sustain. Sad it should happen this way. Nicely Gautami!
Hank
Came here after many days....and found the same magic...lovely poem..and we all keep looking for bones to hang on to ...
Thanks for the treat Gautami..
http://rameshsood.blogspot.in/2013/07/body-doesnt-always-obey-us-osi.html
RS:)
No bones in potato's! what a thought!
(-I get unhealthy relationships tho)
... this one is intriguing.
There is so more to the lines...
When it is over it's over..sometimes we just have to stick to that.
Ouch!
Bury the bones and let the spineless shadow be just that, a coward banished to lurk around in the dark corners!!
Sometimes, the best thing to do is 'let it be.' There is much passion in between the lines here!
Nice use of the words, Gautami. And it's nice to see you! I've read a few poems this week on the end of relationships...seems to be a theme.
lovely words...nice lines!
Thank you for visiting julesstorypageswhirl...
I do not post the story verse on 'blogger' any more.
I really enjoyed those lines in the quote. Potatoe skins, could they hold the bones of books like a book jacket?
As it has been stated - you have taken us back to an emotional place where many of us have been.
The newest story verse addtion was just posted in the links at the Sunday Whirl. :)
~Jules
Strangely enigmatic.
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