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| New York at Night, Vivienne Gucwa |
shadows whisper to me
about your presence
I can't see you in the scarlet night
nor do I see in the day light
but when the sky walks behind me
I feel your caress
a light warm touch of something unknown
spare me a bit, save my sanity
I expect you to come soon
It might seem strange to some
that I await for you
unknown unseen
to be struck by you
an unlikely pair
one flesh and blood
other no one knows what
there is always a first, isn't there?
"uneven gait is sometimes the destiny
and it is also the periphery vision"
31 comments:
I like the feeling you created of knowing something/someone is coming.
"...but when the sky walks behind me..." Wow! I love that bit.
That wait and the prescence ... really like the anticipation you have built here.
I like the play with light, shadows and creating magic atmosphere in your poem...
I'm ever-amazed at the variety these photo prompts elicit. Your last two lines offer a nice bit of philosophy!
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you created a wonderful sense of anticipation with this... a great sense of romance...
There is always a first..and a place to be found in the broken cobbles..together
A mystery of sorts...questions unanswered...on the cobbled stones.
good tension, a lovely ride as we all ponder what might be overtaking you; something deadly or lovely, animate or spectral, intellectual or heart-felt, heart bound; nice job on the prompt.
Love the personification of the sky walking! And the anticipation...ooooh, the anticipation!
There is something uniquely mysterious about walking cobblestone streets on a dark night. Can almost hear the footfalls behind as one walks along, real or ghost images of the past? I enjoyed your take on this weeks image very much.
Your opening lines are a great hook.....they invite the reader in. I loved this, kiddo!
Your poem is a little haunting. I like the mystery.
This reminded me of something dear to me. Thank you.
A feeling of great expectations. Tell us what you find.
i love the message 'there is always a first' and the positive shades....
Opposites often attract but here you have take it to the extreme of who knows what. We feel safe but bored with the mundane but to embrace the unworldly or mysterious can be quite a experience.
I guess we all have tat same phantom lover pacing behind us. You had me from the beginning with this one.
It's good to have an anticipation of some endearing moments from someone close to one's heart!
Hank
I always feel the sky walking behind me, Gautami. Beautiful poem.
Pamela
Love the warmth of the scarlet night...
An intriguing use of the wordle words, leaves me wanting to know more.
A sense of presence...unknown and yet willing to be accepted for what it may be. A mystical journey.
My heart says this ends well, and love lives on. Lovely tone.
Nice composition!:)
I've said this before but it bears repeating ... your poetry is lovely and gets better and better as the years pass.
I do like the cobbled vibe to this one!
Eerie and unsettling! Very nice.
i like the idea of the sky walking behind.....nicely done!
"but when the sky walks behind me"… that is so cool! A nod to the past, the present it seems to me and a also an embracing of the future. Cool.
especially loved 'when the sky walks behind me' as well as the lines starting with 'an unlikely pair'
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