Thursday, February 08, 2007

Transposition.....Poetry Thursday



This weeks' prompt is change. This is what came out of my thoughts.
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Transposition


with blazing tranquility
i stare at space,
seeing the various changes
vividly inside my mind.
the
purple shades,
the orange hues,
intense colours
of my life
passing by.

shaking out
desolate thoughts

i come out whole,
conceding decisively
my happiness
is what I am.

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35 comments:

sage said...

maybe you should dedicate this poem to Descarte.

The tranquility seem interrupted with the whirling colors, which creates in my mind a disconnect, but it seems to come back together at the end. Am I readin this correctly, is it what you meant?

Homo Escapeons said...

Let us not put Descartes before des horse because his four rules were:
1 Never accept anything except clear and distinct ideas
2 Divide each problem into as many parts as are needed to solve it
3 Order your thoughts from simple to complex
4 Always check for oversights

et VOILA we have the perfect prescription for ruining a poem!

gautami tripathy said...

I really like it! Two non-poets disecting my poem. Welcome! Maybe both of you will help me write a thesis!

I dedicate this poem to you both!

Regina Clare Jane said...

Whoa- I was just going to write something simple like "I really liked this, Gautami!"
Ah well- I did, especially the last sentence.
Thanks!

floots said...

the last two lines say it for me
and indeed for all of us

polona said...

i like this very much, gautami.
great solution!

my happiness
is what I am

yes!

Poet with a Day Job said...

I like the idea of auras being what the speaker of the poem sees changing inside the mind.

writerwoman said...

I am depressed today but that poem cheered me some. The last few words make me feel better, like I am good enough however I am.

January said...

Brilliant! Love these lines:

"i come out whole,
conceding decisively
my happiness
is what I am."

Kai C. said...

wonderful as always

/t. said...

i agree
the happiness
line is punchy,
but taken on whole,
this bit 'intense colours of my life passing by' really hits the poetic mark, imo

very colorful, again -- nice work

/t.

david santos said...

Very nice.
Love you
Tank you

Lady Wordsmith said...

This has such a strong finish - quite decisive indeed!

I loved reading this!!

Tammy said...

Lovely thoughts written eloquently and ended with a bang :)

Amalendu said...

true... my happiness is what I am...

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

perfect ending!

Pat Paulk said...

"am", or what I want to be. Love it!!

Crafty Green Poet said...

blazing tranquility - excellent!

Jone said...

The first two lines and the last two are so strong. A powerful poem indeed.

Norma said...

I'm very sensitive to color and hue and its emotional impact but I've never thought about it the way you've presented it. Great job!

Thanks for visiting today.

GeL said...

Hi G,

I like reading your process of change. I can imagine flashes or prisms of color whirling, dancing, beckoning and whatnot as you take charge and decide your path, in life: "Whole" not in partial shapes (indeciveness nor setbacks) Accepting oneself is essential to happiness. Nice response to this poetic prompt.

Lotus Reads said...

conceding decisively
my happiness is what I am


Wow, Gautami, that is powerful! It makes me want to be happy and in the end, that is what it is isn't it? Happiness is a decision. Thanks very much for these wonderful words.

strauss said...

shaking out
desolate thoughts’
i come out whole

Interesting lines, what a shout of positivity...refreshing.

twilightspider said...

I love the optimism here too - this is poetry as affirmation!

ecm said...

I like your ending and the line, "shaking out/desolate thoughts" I agree that I too like the optimism

Don Iannone said...

I like this one a great deal! nice job Gautami. Hope you are well.

Beth said...

Wow.

Thank you for stopping by my blog. I do see what you mean.

Thank you.

giggles said...

Were you reading MY mind? Jesting of course! Those colors walking together bring me immense happiness! A life without color is love without passion! Love your poem...with a powerful ending!

I Am said...

"my happiness is what I am"

BRAVO to Self Realization! We now need to practice Happiness continously to Create bigger Changes.

I Am

Dennis said...

Last four lines for me as well! I agree. Wonderful.

Beloved Dreamer said...

I love your poem gautami, you had me at the last two lines. It would seem we roll around in this vast universe only to become the best thing of all. Happines! Lovely


love-bd

.......deb said...

Hi guatami,

I'm clapping, too. Lovely and hopeful. Especially taken with "conceding decisively/
my happiness", and the colors to set tone. My mind went to a glorius sunrise.

G said...

A cheerfully meditative and satisfyingly conclusive poem!

magiceye said...

colorfully manic!

gautami tripathy said...

Thanks my friends for your comments. Sorry for not replying individually.
I am glad I found PT and via that, most of you.

I salute my old friends and welcome new ones.

Cheers!