Monday, March 16, 2009

lay in lace










nipped at waist
bodice laced-tight
LOST IN THAT MOMENT
both bodies lay together
fingers nipping into waist


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22 comments:

sage said...

Delicious poem

Julia Smith said...

I'd say 'delicious', but Sage beat me to it.

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

line 3 says it all....

venus66 said...

Certainly a good one, Gautami.

anthonynorth said...

It's good to get lost in such moments - but old reality has a habit of eventually saying enough :-)

Linda Jacobs said...

Very sensual! These few words paint quite the rich image!

Annamari said...

I love the image...well done.

angie said...

wonderful!

Tumblewords: said...

Well paced lace!

littlekhargosh said...

i'm sorry but imma use the word again: 'delicious!'

Fledgling Poet said...

I'll say 'luscious'. :~)

OpenChannel said...

I love the sound of "fingers nipping"

(and if you say it fast it sound like "finger snipping"!)

Story Teller said...

Hey, Nice One!!
You write real well ... Hope to see you tomorrow at Tell a Tale, as it launches...
Be the first one to post your entry and accumulate higher points!

songofsea said...

Wow that was some write...sensuous!

AdellBeek said...

I like how you created a nice moment with so few words.

Tina Trivett said...

LOVE this...

TC said...

I really liked this one a lot.

Sepiru Chris said...

Hello Gautami.

Lovely poem.

To me, this conjures a Victorian ether party, before and after the bottle is opened.

Or a coming out debutante's ball.

Great work, Gautami.

Tschuess,
Chris

sudharm baxi said...

hey

Good play with words!!

Beloved Dreamer said...

Very nice Tami but then you are a true poet. Lovely.


love,Melanie-bd

!nversed Poignancy! said...

Ah!, How romantic..really mushy and refreshing..
Loved this!

SweetTalkingGuy said...

Hi Gautami, Here I am, sorry I've been away, I could see your blog but my keyboard was swimming in coffee and would'nt let me post anything...

That Moment seems like a nice place to be Lost in!!