at age seven, I dreamt of you
your lopsided genuine smile
reflected on my facade
at age sixteen, I craved for you
siding up to you for your touch
at age twenty one, I woke up
next to you, your ramble
tickling me senseless
at age thirty, I basked under
your love, only your love
at age forty, I am all alone
picking up the pieces after you
avenge what, sadly I know not
30 comments:
very true, sad and beautiful
Love how you take us through the years...and through the feelings without a fairy-tale ending.
This is heartbreaking...you expressed it with eloquence.
i hate love stories like this... they always make me sad.
I like the way you are able to 'voice' what is happening in so many peoples lives!
Drew my in and kept me rapped all the way through. Nice.
Beautifully put Girl!
40 seems to be a painful and lonely age for so many, i felt this poem
The story of so many lives, unfortunately.
Half a lifetime in a few lines. So much joy and pain is contained in this poem!
That is so sweet and a little sad too :(
seven to forty in a flash!
Well done! A bittersweet piece of life...
Was hoping for a happy ending!
The progressive story of life. Well done!
I walked with you this time. Very very nice one
Avenging for what! Exactly! Very poignant.
beautiful, but sad...
Like Tumblewords, I had hoped for a happy ending. But life isn't always like that, is it?
Hi Gautami, just stopped by to read this again, and that wise last line - avenge what? sadly I know not!
-Andy
सुप्रभात, I liked the compression of emotion through time into minimal verses. Beautifully done.
Wow. I loved the journey, even though the ending was painful. Very eloquent.
-Nicole
i couldn't agree more. beautiful.
this is a long time to go thru the motions with someone :(
Sad... I wonder what future years will bring.
the other commenters have all said it before me--beautiful and sad
I like the ending.
Um. Um. Um. Sigh. You got me.
so unfortuately true... especially in the ending.
Tami, this is beautiful sad but just wonderfully written. Well done my friend.
love, Melanie
Heartbreaking, yes, is the first word that came to my mind.
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