Sunday, March 08, 2009

chop it nicely

coiled strands fall flailingly
on the cold floor
sticking and coagulating
staring at it with revulsion
I curse myself at my stupidity

feeling like a clod I am left watching
unappetisingly congealed
cold noodles falling on the ground
all this, as I had chopped my sticks
& thrown my fork on the road

17 comments:

Bruce Miller said...

5 second rule says
go ahead don't beat yourself:
cleanliness sickens

anthonynorth said...

As long as you enjoy it :-)

SandyCarlson said...

Oops! With or without sticks or fork, I have known this experience!

Maggie said...

It is hard to prepare any food when the cook`s heart is not connected to the dish and it is no more than a chore.

Good read.

spacedlaw said...

What a strange moment you have captured there. I like it.

Deborah Godin said...

Cold noodles on the cold floor. I'd definitely want to take a different fork!

Janice Thomson said...

This is different - kind of funny and kind of embarrassing too :)

sgreerpitt said...

you've taken a wonderful twist on the prompt -- fork on the road! Humor and chagrin come through in your poem.

Anonymous said...

Love the laugh and the loss of all useful tools.

Tumblewords: said...

So clever and visual. Love it!

Anonymous said...

I enjoyed your poem and the humor.

qualcosa di bello said...

i feel this frustration (but my dog would love it!...he is our professional floor cleaner during/after meals)

marde said...

Such vivid imagery, and such a recognizable experience. Creative use of the prompt!

Anonymous said...

I can't eat with chop stick, either. Good poem

Anonymous said...

that was a great use of the prompt...i can only compare to the last raw egg crashing...

Beth P. said...

and up a creek without a paddle, as well.

My my.

Thanks for the smile--

susan said...

Sounds like more than the meal was cold. Her emotions certainly were hot.

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